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| OtherCat1 2008-04-26 ch 1,  | abuseAn interesting beginning if way too short. And slight nitpick...if you're "dead to the world" you are unconscious. Also, you've confused "Your" with "You're". From your summary, I'm not sure the premise works--I really doubt Genai would ever agree to a Contract--and the instant the prospective demon master's guard slipped, he'd have them for breakfast. |