please post more i love this story

i loved it, i cant wait for more
running.with.wolves

I REALLY LOVE YOUR STORY! BUT I REALLY REALLY HATE HOW YOU PROTRAY LEAH, SHE IS NOTHING LIKE THAT! AND YOU KNOW IT! DONT MAKE HER THE ANTAGONIST BECAUSE SHE SHOULDN BE! LEAH IS NOT SOME ** LIKE YOU HAVE CREATED HER TO BE. PLEASE CHANGE THAT ITS REALLY BOTHERING ME! LEAH AND JADE ARE A LOT A LIKE BUT LEAH IS MORE DEEP.

loved it (: it was so gud.. just wish it was finished!
oxo

uh oh!

Wow - progressive chapter. I like.

Embry and Jade had a great dialogue, and I'm glad to see that the relationship is going somewhere, and that they can finally talk to one another. Important step.

Now...a bit of helpful criticism? Don't forget the rules of any romance - the two main characters can't really be together until the end. Create an obstacle. We must have conflict or it gets boring. This chapter was good, because they aren't really full force yet, this chapter was still working out kinks in the relationship, but they need to have a problem. Perhaps Jade gets propositioned by a boy at school and Embry hits him, and then gets charged with assault. Or maybe Embry's mom reveals who his dad really is and it sends the pack into a frenzy and Embry withdraws from everyone. Just a few suggestions.
Also, please don't be an author who writes beyond the story. Once you have attained the climax, resolve it in one or two chapters, and then end. You can always do a sequel.
I love you, keep going. I am favoriting you (finally! WTH took me so long?).

Yummy fanfiction goodness. I want another serving, please!

i just dont get why everyone keeps forgetting that la push is an indian reservation so why would a white girl be living there? im just obsessed with keeping things canon and a white family on an indian reservation is dumb!..please try to remember that writers!

Yay! They are unseparable now.

Um...I think Jade should be a little gentle with Embry. But it's your story and you could do whatever you want with it.

Come on. Please update soon.

I love it. It's really great.

Love it, update soon!

Love it!

wow, cant wait for more.