Good. I think people should write more poems.

You don't have to put a comma at the end of every single line, is my only suggestion. Only put a comma there if you would put a comma there if this was a paragraph and not a poem.

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ThorHammer17

Beautiful. That is the only word I can use to describe it. This is the best poem I have read on the site in a while. I took great pleasure from reading your poem. There was just the right amount of emotion; sadness, joy, love; to make it flow very well. You have talent, my friend, and I hope you keep writing.