Fantastic

very nice fic i say well thats all i kan say for now so

ill be waiting for the next kks _

Yay. a nice but odd story. The noticable deviation from the canon begins with Christmas. Nice. very nice

This was a story worthy of beauty and fame. It was lovely.

Very interesting, you do have to wonder how he can take all those beatings and the girls ARE a little ok VERY hard on him :) I tried the posted link at the end of the chapter - didn't work !

nice, i loved this book, i'll read thr others in the morning, this story kicks ass, i hope to see more in the near future. keep the makoto/keitaro alive!

ikari shinji

Great story! But I thought the Naru dinner thing was a little extreme. I know Naru overreacts, but to overreact at that kind of level seems too much to me. Great story otherwise, though.

you've mispelled Suu-chan and her sister's names.
First of all, it's Kaolla, not Kaorra
second of all, Amara us supposed to be Amalla

That's a really good story, indeed.
but there are still some spelling and grammer errors left over from your editing, maybe you should get someone to be an editor on your next book?
what else...? right, while i liked the relationship you made between Suu and Kei, Suu seems to act much... stranger when alone or thinking about things.
Hm.. You may be making Naru a bit too violent (never thought i'd say that -_- ) like in that long Eva fic (i read it too... even though i love Asuka

Very well written, but it seemed to drag on in some parts. Despite this, I enjoyed this fic alot.
Gotta read part 2 now!

I really like this story. Its really well written.

one word.

DAMN.

An excellent and well-thout out story, with good allusions to future chapters and accurate portrayals of the various characters. As appropriate for a dark romance, the humor is slightly muted in favor of dramatic scenes such as Naru's realization that hurting Keitaro is not acceptable, and Su's dreams, which reveal a much more sympathetic and realistic side of her that is often neglected. An excellent and engaging story that just made it onto my favorites, and I shall read part II soon. Bravo!

Nice fic! INteresting take on it; while I'm more of an N/K or Shinobu/Keitaro guy; this is good none of the less!

This was a good Alternate Universe. I would've NEVER thought of Keitaro acually having feelings for Motoko. Nevertheless, I liked it. Keep it up