yah, please have Luke and Leia be Padawans during rebellion, but do that clone of Anakin too, no Padme death, Luminara lives, have otehr Jedi live too to help Rebellion...please hurry it up!

good...later have them yell at a Force-ghost (or two) and get frustrated with them (Force-ghostS)
'hug''hug''hug''hug''hug''hug''hug'
Btw, I saw Chris, Maria, and Kimberely.

Ani Unduli, Anne, Siri Tachi, Fireball, Ani Laminara, etc...

Your story is dialogue heavy. It can be good, when done well, but (and I mean no offense) you haven't done it well. Long story short, I am so confused right now... And I'm too tired to try to figure it out...

You need to include more explaination. For instance, I have absolutely no idea who's related to who, and how that all works out. I'm also confused as to where they are, and what exactly is happening.

However, that said, I can say, from what I've understood, that this is a very interesting idea, and that I hope you take this review as it is meant to be, friendly advice for further improvement, and not a flame.

Keep writing,
D. Ken

nice story! can't wait to read more

I love it! Btw...NO GROSS STUFF HAPPENING HERE! POR FAVOR! I love this story except am dry for imagination department, so gotta go! Will give you ideas if any come to mind!

Ani Unduli

pretty hilarious so far lol

please update soon

that is GOOD! please do another.
Ideas:
Obi and Siri doon't know who their bounty hunter is until after honeymoon is over
Obi and Siri stay on Endor for a week...or 2
We find out from Luminara's talking to Siri that her husband was
a.) Tarkin
b.) Ky Narec
c.) Any other Council Member
d.) Any other random Jedi

perfect! i love it. why the heck did you make me dress as a bounty hunter wait, ask i will not. probably wanted it, i did. why, tho' did my mom take the brush to my backside? remind me who my dad was

great, do chapter 4 now NOW!

terrific! thanks for posting it! (finally!) Do 2nd chapter! I got several ideas that are killing me! See ya tomorrow!