|Reviews for Devil's Breath|
| LeggoMyGreggo411 6/18/10 . chapter 23
This was a great chapter. FINALLY Greg opens up! Great chapter! And I hope the problem with Greg is just that he is hungry… PLEASE…. NO MORE PROBLEMS WITH GREG!
Also, with the beginning of this chapter, and how its starts off with the dream, and at the final part of his dream, when Greg was in the casket and saying that he wanted to live and then he woke up... I think it would have been cool if you continued it a little more and had like the casket shut with Greg in it, and have him laying in the dark or whatever. Your probably confused as to why I am saying this, but in a few scenes in previous chapters, Nick kept trying to comfort Greg and help Greg relate to him through the situation of him being buried alive but Greg kept snapping back at him that they aren’t the same or whatever even though he didn't know what it felt like for Nick. Well if the dream continued with the casket shutting and he can't get out or whatever, it could have also been like Greg knowing what Nick went through too. Just a thought and think that would have been cool if you continued with that :)... But what you have is GREAT too ;D! It’s chilling, and it reminds me of the scene in the Grave Danger episode, where Nick gets buried alive and he is having like his dream/hallucinations thing.
| LeggoMyGreggo411 6/17/10 . chapter 22
OMG, this chapter was so emotional. I was crying. I love love LOVE Eric Szmanda/Greg Sanders and reading the phrases like putting the gun to his temple or when Grissom bluntly said "Greg tried to kill himself" oh my god, it brought chills up my spine.
Also, when you said that Greg put on his Marilyn Manson music to block out the music, because I am too a Marilyn Manson fan, a song that I imagined Greg playing was his song The Beautiful People... so as I was reading what I was reading during the parts that the music was playing, knowing and hearing the lyrics play while I was reading added such an eerie vibe. I LOVED IT and I felt more connected with what I was reading. You should give it a try. I also think that this song works because in the chapter before, Greg was looking in the mirror and he thought that his body with all of its scars looked disgusting, well the chorus lyrics in this songs start off with "Hey you! What do you see? Something beautiful..." Its the disturbing irony. As I said, you should give it a try. Plus its a loud song, so it fitted your discription of music to block out the gun shot.
So yeah, love this chapter and LOVE THIS STORY! Can't wait to read the rest ;)!
| Yoshimara 6/9/09 . chapter 29
I liked it! Good job with the descriptions. I could feel all the sadness and anxiety Greg felt as I read through it! I can't wait to read the sequel (which I will do next) :D keep up the good work!
| Maria-Elric05 5/27/09 . chapter 29
Please write a sequel. It seems like Greg is ready to move on with his life and I would love to see what happens. So please, write a sequel.
| wildbats 4/8/09 . chapter 29
I think Criminal Minds writers saw my story and liked it and stole my idea, somewhat. LOL
| JadeSyan 4/5/09 . chapter 1
This story is incredible! In just 7 chapters you managed to describe one of the most disturbing mistakes of society, all the prejudices and intolerance. What people need to learn: No matter your skin tone, sexuality, nationality ecc. we all are human and we all have a right to live.
You should think that in a society, where everyone is so f* proud of the development, everyone would be accepted but I can already see it where I come from. I'm from a small village in the north of Italy (btw, sry for any grammar mistakes) and you're almost an outsider here if you think it's alright to be gay. My grandmother for example thinks that being gay is some kind of abnormality and worst of all, she managed to pass this opinion on to my mother. All we can hope for is that one day people will finally stop judging other people and accept them just like they want to be accepted.
| charlie-becks 1/22/09 . chapter 29
i really want u to write a sequel, its a brilliant and depressin story an im really glad gregs gettin better, but a sequel would be brilliant, if u write one please let me know :D
| Samsara Dallire 9/22/08 . chapter 29
Hey this is a good story. I'd say do a sequel.
| krage 8/26/08 . chapter 1
interesting plot so far
| Reine Sumabat 8/20/08 . chapter 29
Wow. I just caught your story and that was awsome. I must say though, I don't like what you did to Greggy though. I was messed in a way. But other than that, very good.
| lamcsi 8/8/08 . chapter 29
I liked your story. Poor Greg I'm glad everything worked out all right for him and Marie, too. I would love to see you write a sequel.
| sparkycola1 7/20/08 . chapter 29
Great story! Very well written, thanks for posting - I enjoyed it! D
| pure-white-angel 7/15/08 . chapter 29
Awesome ending to an awesome story!
| StarShinobi 7/11/08 . chapter 29
Fantastic ending to an incredible story. Greg and Marie sound like a great couple! Thank you for writting such an amazing story!
| 101spacemonkey 7/11/08 . chapter 29
i thought it was so sweet, its like a full circle!
the storm was a brilliant way to end this, and i love that despite all their fears they came together in a way... and opened up
and greg has his job back!
in relation to a sequel, i would love to see one, however i would be a little worried... as this seems perfect as it is, so i dont know, maybe if you decide on a summary and post it on your profile, or use it as a poll...
what ever you decide, i plan to be there to read the posible sequel... although i may be away for a while as my inbox has about 140 (and im not joking!) other things that i need to check out first, sorry!