This story is really good. I can't wait to read more of it.

Keep up the writting i whant to knew what happenn keep the good work :)

Sorry it took so long for me to review.
This chapter was great.
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Excellent!

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I still think it needs just a little more detail, but other than that it's good. Keep it up.

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Good

OMG OMG is Darien going to be unfaithful? will Serena dump his butt? Is Melody going to Break them up?

Again it read like an actual episode, that's good. But you made the classic blunder of all fan fic authors... you inserted yourself into the story. PrincessHarmony22, Sailor Harmony... it's not so bad though. Allot of authors do it, when you do you just have to be subtle about it. First of all don't give her the same name as your pen name, I would suggest taking a name from the zodiac (seeing as the Sailors have a planet and stars theme) maybe Sailor (your astrological sign) or something. Don't get disheartened, it's still a good story. Very worth reading.
Keep going. ^_^

I like it so far. It reads like a script for one of the dubbed episodes, so it's in keeping with most of the Sailor Moon traditions here in America. I feels like an episode of the series. However, because it is written like a script or a screen play it lacks allot of description. Remember: because your audience is reading instead of watching you have to put extra detail into your narration of surroundings, actions and OCs.
Sorry if this was allot, but I like to give long reviews when I start a new story. Good job on your first try. Keep it up. ^_^