 Morgomir 10/23/08 . chapter 2Although this is a great piece of writing. I can't overcome my hatred for Kinsey. Keep up the good work. |
 PatriciaS 10/23/08 . chapter 2Nice to see this one extended and you've got the feel of him ... willing to wait before pouncing. Looking forward to his plotting thanks for sharing. |
 Anon 5/2/08 . chapter 1 Suitably creepy concept... But how Jack would have been unaware that the guy's his uncle...
BTW... 52-39 13!
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 Quacked Lurker 5/2/08 . chapter 1 NOO! Yikes!
Kinsey is O'Neill's uncle? That is twisted! In a good way.
Let me guess, Robbie is short for Robert. That's just a guess-and this was well written. I can see a young teenage boy taking that vow and being successful at it.
Plus this explains how and why those two are such enemies-and it seems no introduction was necessary.
narrative view-interesting, and how it ties in with the series was great! Loved it, in-spite of the ending. Forget that statment-the last half.
Angush and pain, but also joy and life. A perfect combination, as a well-written tie-in. (official series) |
 not a zatarc 5/2/08 . chapter 1Ooh, that's spooky! x_0; But very interesting idea. Nicely done. :) |
 mjm 5/2/08 . chapter 1 oh! VERY promising start... |
 PatriciaS 5/2/08 . chapter 1Interesting idea and could explain a lot about their behaviour to each other. Thanks for sharing. |
 iwrite4fun 5/1/08 . chapter 1OH! You know, you should write a whole story just based on this single idea- this is something I've never even thought about before and should really be explored! Think of all the nasty things you could have Kinsey do to Jack over the years... |