Reviews for O Keepers of the Crystal

Fan Fan Girl
2008-05-01
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abuseAhah! Strawberry, you posted! I love you now! A whole lot! Totally!

And an interesting concept you have here. I've always thought it'd be fun to do a crossover. Now I get to read one. :D I'm glad that Kalas is the main character cause lately it seems like I'm the only one who loves him enough to write about him.

I see that you've killed off Gramps and Fee already. That was an interesting move on your part, since those two shape his personality immensely. He would, without a doubt, be a different person were those two still alive. I would love to read a story starring non-traumatized Kalas (aka Kalas with an actual family)but I realize that for this particular story that's not possible. Oh well...

It's kind of late so this review is going to be a little disjointed, just to warn you. So while I'm thinking of it, in the first paragraph, "The blue-haired adolescent boy took off on a sprint..." You can definitely take out "boy" because adolescent is a noun... and normally you don't describe nouns with nouns. Haha. Also, I belive it's "in a sprint" and not "on."

Anyways. I'm not familiar with this particular Final Fantasy game, so I look forward to being introduced to this new world. Just a thought though, you might want to explain references from the other game such as Goblins and Miasma when they come along in the story. Might want to keep this in mind.

Oh, I'm just so glad you're doing this story. :D I've been looking forward to this for some time, you know! Keep up the good work, and take your time with updates. Good luck!

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