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| Stuffed Hippo 2008-05-04 ch 1,  | abuseYou should check over the grammer. The tense of story seems to change alot, making it difficult to read. For example: "“Today I went on a ride around the grounds, it was very refreshing”, Anna SAID to Molly, who was crocheting a blanket. “That sounds lovely, are you going to go for a ride again tomorrow?”, Molly ASKS as she finishes her blanket and holds it up to see if she missed a stitch." |