Awwws! How nice! R u going to continue? :D

Interesting style and beginning... I love it!

Omj epic more !

Oo, great idea for a fanfic !

Please continue to update, I'd love to see who'd win. (:

can't wait till chapter 2! :)

Mello scrubbing the dirt in the apartment makes me roll on the flour laughing .Update soon please!

Oh, the tension. :D

I have honestly nothing to nitpick about in this. You grammar was fine, and your sentence structure was proper. The descriptions were great and characters were... well, their proper character.

There's not much I can say about this for you to improve on, except maybe... well, nothing! :D

This is truly really promising, and I can't wait to see what's in store. Your reviews are in the double digits, it's a good sign! Don't leave us waiting too long, but make sure to make the next chapter good! ;)

Great job

-LL

“It’s hot as balls in here!” lol. I can't say I really get it... but I officially love that expression!

This is really promising. I can only imagine what's in store for the loser. Oh boy. Heheh.

Can't wait!

Oh! Suspensful! I wanna see what happens and who wins!

Update soon!

Dude, where's the lemon?

Oh My Gid.

I can so see Mello being forced to clean and scrub every single inch of the apartment.

Can't wait for the next chappie!

XD I see potential! I love it so far. More please.

I can't wait to see how this turns out. Please update soon.

Oh, I wanna know what happens! Matt sure has this whole thing planned out XD Can't wait till your next chapter, this is really a good idea for your first Death Note fanfic

omg!wright more plz!