Hello,

This was SO touching. Linguini always struck me as a very emotional, slightly fragile, person. Like when he first talks to Remy at the river bank and seems about to cry when he talks about the jobs he's lost. This is exactly how I pictured him beating himself up for yelling at Remy.

I thought the reference to 1 Corinthians 13 was incredibly appropriate. "She believed in heaven, so... she's covered. uh... afterlife speaking.." Alfredo told Skinner that his mother had some sort of religious beliefs. Naturally, I prefer to think that they were the same as mine. =)

The one thing that I would critique, is the rapid transition to fear at the end. He seemed so broken up, I would have thought that it would take a while for the fear of Ego to build up again. It just felt a little disconnected there.

Bravo on your ability write with such emotional depth. I almost cried while reading this. It has inspired me to try and write a Ratatouille fic! =) I want him to give Remy another apology (other than defending him in front of the chefs). I'll have to try very hard not to copy what you've done.

The PreacherMan

What a depressing, yet thoughtful story you made through Linguini's perspective. Linguini and Remy are my top favorite characters in the film of Ratatouille. You did a great job laying this out. I love how Linguini still had heart for the poor Remy. The imagery of Remy "skittering across the cobblestone streets of Paris" is excellent as well as adding "the fear, suffering face..." I can so picture that. Poor Little Chef (Remy). Without each other, they wouldn't have succeeded.

I loved this story so much that I read it to my sister, and she agrees that it's one of the best Ratatouille stories she's heard.

This is so very Lingini, him arguing with his own conscience. He seems like a pretty honest and morally sensitive guy in the movie, so this works really well. And dear me, his conscience is not kind, is it? "You're a fine one to talk about love. You don't even know what the word means...You destroyed him. And for what? Some cheese?" Almost had *me* crying. I liked the reference to Corinthians, too.

"He hesitated, then, knowing it was true, he blurted, 'I love you!'" Let me take this opportunity to say how much I love how you depict the friendship between Remy and Linguini in your stories. (I've read 'The Challenge', BTW, though I have yet to review it.) They're probably the truest friends that either of them will ever have, and you depict their bond as such a respectful, deep, and beautiful thing that it almost makes me jealous. :) The movie didn't go into this much depth, that's for sure. It couldn't.

"A true friend sticks closer than a brother"...that's definitely Remy and Linguini.

Anyhow, this story gets five stars from me! As usual, fantastic writing, fantastic characterization, and I look forward to reading more!

MC

And then that leads to, "Do you know what you would like this evening sir?" "Yes, I'd like your heart, roasted on a spit!" Poor Linguini; he's always been my favorite. Nice job! :)

Amazing story... I absolutely love it! He's so in character, and the entire moment seems like it should've been in the movie!! Great job!!

>"Little Chef! Little Chef!" he called out into the cool night air. Somewhere in the distance, a clock struck four in the morning. "Little Chef!" Linguini called, the wind carrying his voice away. "Come back! I'm sorry!..."<

This was nicely heartbreaking-- it calls to my mind the desperation of looking for lost pets. SO glad I know the ending to the story is a good one! :)

I really like this.

I think my favorite thing about it is Linguini swearing. 'How could he, how could he. how... shit. how COULD he?!' brilliant! I love it. Oh and, "Oh SHIT! Ego!" with the italics on Ego. =D!

But when I get over that...

'the friendly, familar black-and-whilte tile and glowing copper somehow hateful, mocking.'
^that's cool. It's like the guilt deep in his subconsious trying to surface.

"Rats. Alfredo shuddered."
^That's so interesting. With the italics on rats. It's interesting because he never says ANYTHING like that in the movie. He's so respectful toward Remy and everything. But after this betrayal, he actually thinks it. And the italics make it all the more meaningful. Oh, and then he actually says, "Rat." I love the definition you put... disloyal, unfaithful, untrustworthy. And it's an angry mantra in his head. Great!

"After all I did for him…" No, that didn't seem right. "After all he did for me…"
Love that! Then the mini flashback of Remy coming back to him makes it perfect.

Alfredo really hated that voice. It always made him own up to things he really rather wouldn't confess to. He sloshed the water around the floor defiantly. Conscience wasn't right. Not this time.

Good for Linguini for caring--at least he knows he did something wrong and wants to make up for it.