i luved the way it was written the italics were brilliant! and your right it is a neat syle!

i love the way you portrayed jack! after all he has lost so many of the people he loved in the past so obviously this would emotionly effect him!

i didn't think it was appy at all i thoght it was brill!

janto-tastic!

The way you did that was really cool! It all just flowed perfectly, as if it was a transcript of Jack's thoughts. I thought the way he interupts himself, and corrects what he was thinking was a brilliant idea.

That really really struck deep in me, and it's one of the most moveing things I've read in a logn time (and I'm pretty sure I've read most Janto fics on here).

It makes me so happy to find stuff like this! It's like you got completely under Jack's skin and you worked him really well.

Again, great work! I hope you write some more Janto soon! xx

No, this is good! I like the italics, and it's not too sappy, it's exactly the vibe I got from Jack after 'exit wounds', so keep it up!

As the princess of the run on sentence, I see nothing wrong with your style. I enjoyed this tale

This review was written as I read the story; before I saw your comments at the end.

"I enjoyed this. Very brave. But I hope you are up for some concrit; you might want to double check on your pronoun case. The mismatches between italics and cases (You've got some him's" that should've been "he's" and t'other way round too) confused me about who was doing what to whom at times.

Like the story though and look forward anything more. Your use of italics is innovative, if perhaps a tad excessive (as I think you suspect). The underlining for shared experience, however, is understated and deliciously clever."

Then I got to the end of the story and saw your comments...

You asked about your use of "run-on" sentences. James Joyce managed it without punctuation for 60 pages or so, as I recall from Ulysses. What's a paragraph amongst friends! I really liked that stream of consciousness feel.

Oh, and there are many ways to portray Jack - it is your story... he's your Jack while you write; lucky you! Enjoy him :-)

Really nice job. I liked the poetic nature of the fic. And the italics, those were good too. C'est bon, c'est bon!

Hmm, I actually really liked this. I can see where, depending on the mood, it might seem that you've made Jack a bit sappy, potentially, but really he has so many facets to his personality, and I like to think one of them is a tad romantic and for sure lonely, so this really does fit. Beautiful job.

HWF

God! You know i loved that! Thankies! and Torchwood was too good for you NOT to get addicted to it! lol

Luff luff!