you do great love it!

Hahah. I love the movie Walk the Line. Good story, Great writing. Loved this chapter, so you have to write more soon. :]

Thanks,

Juliet.

Ha! That was fast! This chapter was really good.

I've seen Walk the Line. It really was an amazing movie! I cant wait to see what other lines from movies you will come up with!

Update soon!

Okay, so I was going to put this on the other chapter but I can only put one review on per chapter. So I put it on this one.

I am really glad that you changed the Fred and George thing. I cant wait to read what will come next, please update again soon!

I really liked this chapter, the only problem that I saw was that instead of George you had Fred. Normally that wouldnt be a problem but you implied that Fred died in the war.

Great story though, please continue!

Great story so far but I have one little thing to say; I think you've got Fred George mixed up about half way through that chapter. I'm sure it's already been mentioned though... Sorry!

Try more describing words with not so many nouns. Other than that, keep going!