brilliant, brilliant just brilliant. which means update or pay the price, so if i was u i would update. so UPDATE!

I really like this story. I always though Revan and Carth should get their happy ending after all they've been through. Keep writing~ x3

Another wonderful chapter, well done. Your characterisations are very good.

Very nice chapter. I love the use of the necklace. Your description of the flashback was top-notch, well done.

I like this chapter. I love stories that focus on characters doing ordinary things, and I really liked Carth and Dustil in this chapter.

I LOVE loveloveloveLove how protective Carth is in this chapter. Hope he doesn't turn into some sort of mad hermit clutching his blaster and muttering. Thank you for writing. Thank you thank you thank you.

I love the relationship betwixt Carth and Mrs. Lawson. Exactly how two people should know eachother. (or am i just saying that>;p)

Oh my.




Beautiful.

Kiera rocks. You rock. Life rocks.

I like your narrative style. It's got an interesting pace and rhythm and keeps me reading.

I will say that I was very confused as to why Kreia (the old witch) was saying goodbye to everyone in the first chapter... but I did figure it out eventually... (I'm a little slow sometimes) :D

Your wording's good, as are your descriptions ("They sparkle, like little drops of moisture, resting on a leaf from the morning mist on Kashyk.") However, you do need to work on various sentence structure and grammar things. Don't switch from past to present tense. Be sure dialogue tags (which tell who is speaking) appear on the same line as the dialogue itself. Watch comma use, and be sure dialogue isn't too clunky ("However, my asking you to be here has nothing to do with asking any of you to accompany me on this journey I must take." just doesn't sound like how anyone talks.)

In direct contrast to that, your bits of introspection ("Canderous, the man of grate pride, had always had a place in her heart. He had given her the strength she needed to keep going. If he could change his ways, certainly he could help others find their path to honor and peace as well." etc.) are very good and smoothly written, and I think you've got the characterizations down perfectly.

Thank you, this story is so sweet and forcful. I love Keira's kindness to Mission. and i love how mature they all are. Hope to see this one finished ;]