Reviews for Black Roses Red

Reviews For: Black Roses Red

avatarjk137 2008-07-21 ch 5,	abuse"Oh my God! You broke Kenny's heart!" I actually thought this was a pretty good chapter. You certainly didn't slip up on the blindness thing this time. Good work.
Movie-Brat 2008-07-20 ch 5,	abuseIt's great as usual. Toph is still in character and so is everyone else, that's big plus from me.
avatarjk137 2008-07-06 ch 4,	abuseGreat work. One thing - Toph noticed, from a distance, Katara flipping them off behind her back, which I think is pushing it. I did like the other male characters you brought in. The thought of Double D and Alice break-dancing makes me crack up.
Movie-Brat 2008-07-06 ch 4,	abuseEverything's getting good. Your dialogue's still good and the interactions between the characters are cool. Can't wait to read the next chapter. :)
The Shadow Syndicate 2008-07-06 ch 4,	abuseAmerican Mcgee's Alice eh? Great choice for a character.
Yellowfur 2008-06-05 ch 3,	abuseHi, Casa! First let me say I really rather like this. Now, I'm going to do this review in my usual format: crit first, what I liked second. Now. It pains me to nitpick about these things because the writing is so good (this kind of thing seems to happen often), but I feel the need to say that at certain parts I see a lack of realism. I know both Toph and Kenny have their own set of problems, and I don't know how that plays into it, but I found their conversation unrealistic; how it so suddenly went from concern to anger to... kissing. I have a feeling that there is a valid internal reason to why things went the way they did with those two, so I'm just letting you know the vibes were a little weird if that's NOT the case. Also, Katara's whole attitude seems not only somewhat unrealistic but a little... un-Katara-like. I understand that Katara is loyal, and that's in-character, but she seems loyal to the point of violence and obsession. Now once again, this may just be the Katara this fic is giving me, so if it is, just tell me. And, this isn't necessarily crit, just for my own purposes: you're going to have to clarify for me to what extent Toph is blind, because I'm a wee bit confused there. Okay! Now that I'm done sucking your blood, I'll tell you what I thought was great, because it's great. The writing itself, the content is so awesome. From Toph's point of view, it's very blunt, honest, to the point, and it rocks. I have to compliment your choice of characters. You have quite a motley mixture, and I sense some great chemistry between them. A peppy camp counselor jazz is a very smart idea. Alice playing a big role is an idea I admit I approach with caution even on my end (as the reader), but I sense it's a challenge you'll be able to handle. Lil was a good choice, as she is one of many, many overlooked characters. Hinata has her share of problems and your take on her for this story should be interesting. And of course, we have Toph, everyone's favorite rebellious little girl (not so "little girl" in this case). Kenny as a love interest will provide a necessary hot little twist. And Josie - now that's innovative! Besides that, the whole concept is great. Endless opportunities for harshness and angst and humor and friendship and a plethora of other good things. I get antsy just wondering what will happen to Toph. It's a goldmine for WRITING! There are so many different things you could do with it and I can't wait to see where you go next. Oh, the potential. In conclusion, except for a couple details, I like it. I like it a whole damn lot. Until next time. -Furby
avatarjk137 2008-05-30 ch 3,	abuseInteresting set of characters. We've got Mystery Cocky Boy, Josie (obviously of Josie and the Pussycats), and Lil (almost certainly 'Rugrats' Lil). And Counselor Jazz. Well, I liked the chapter; you're handling things in a very different fashion.
Movie-Brat 2008-05-30 ch 3,	abuseI was hoping this would be updated. Overall, everything's going good so far. And I like how you wrote everyone's introductions.
avatarjk137 2008-05-16 ch 2,	abuseBesides a massive shot of angst that fills me up for the week, this was great. Good work!
The Shadow Syndicate 2008-05-15 ch 2,	abuseWow. THis is better than the first chapter. Will Hinata relate to Toph? Or will Katara get a smack down?
Movie-Brat 2008-05-15 ch 2,	abuseThere's so much fascination in this story, you know? Anyway, things are getting interesting. Can't wait to read more.
avatarjk137 2008-05-05 ch 1,	abuseSweet. This is quite promising, and the journal-blog-style format is cool. Don't know what fandom Alice is from, but whatever. By the way, at the beginning of the second 'entry', I think the word you're looking for is 'hallelujah'. You've got a phonetic spelling of it there; if that's on purpose, you can ignore that comment.
The Shadow Syndicate 2008-05-04 ch 1,	abuseI think that this is going to be a great story Casa.
Movie-Brat 2008-05-04 ch 1,	abuseThis has alot of potential. And your writing is good, so are your tenses so overall, this story sounds really interesting and I hope to see the second chapter.

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