Ah, the revlatory moment. Though the full scale of the issue remains unfounded. I have wanted to use that word for some time.

Anyway, you continue to impress with your ability to blend the canon with your design.

The bit with the vest was another nice touch. Blushing? Well the process progresses.

And with the realization of the caue for the changes you set the stage for true heroism. The most basic definition for a hero is a person who willingly sets themself against overwhelming odds selflessly. In short self sacrifice is the key to heroism.

Normaslly heropic self sacrifce is depicted as a hero either layning down their life or giving up their chance to obtaining something they greatly desire. Your story has the hero having to literally "self" sacrifice, giving up a large portion of their identity in order to save others.

Well played, well played indeed!

Oh and yet again you give a tip of the hst at the end with the swaying hips.

Be well.

This story deserves more love.

You have chosen to build on the realtionship between McCloud and the prince I see. Lots of potemtial with someone there witnessing the process. PArticularly a child, they can be far more flexible in matters of the extraordinary than adults.

On that note the vest lending might be some maternal instincts kicking in. Still saying that makes me unpleasantly recall some rather misandrist lines on males lacking compassion. I do not think that is even remotely your intent, but to often TG seems to carry fetish or misandrist undertones. In fact your lacl such elements is one reason I think this story is so grand.

The pants make for an excellent closer. So often artists focus on the torso or head, they seem to not realize the real differences are under the belt. *heheheh*

I really hope more people review. This deserves it more than a lot of the material on this site.

Been to long.

Well we have reached the chronological begining. Knowing how it will end up detracts something I admit.

However, a decent mind would reach the conclusion from this chapter alone. So rather than pointlessly trying to obscure the course it would seem you are going to come at us with both barrels primed. Alright, they do say it is the journey and not the destination that matters.

Divergence is minimal so far. That is good, too many AHs and AUs begin with bold strokes. The point of the butterfly effect is a tiny divergence creating massive shifts in the flow of events. Flash/poof leaves much to be desired.



Your style is excellent, conmsidering printing this out as insurane aganist loss of the site. Will abide by the copyright data listed below.

Oh, I note the surprise of the crew. So this will be kept under the hat. Well, the game is structured to make that plausible. It is always preferable to cut with the wood rather than against.

I am very hopeful that you will opt for a slow tranformation. Like any good story time is critical, and a drawn out metamorphisis has great potential.

Five reviews? And to think I complain on getting few reviews. I do believe you made a mistake posting it all at once. After that it sank, pulled down by the lesser writings of fools and noncommittals.

What you have here is art.

I an a fan of transformations, have been since I was a lad. In shows I was often disappounte how quickly the matter was typically resolved. I hate statric characters, unchange by whatever happens around them. One reason I took to Doctor Who, he is fascinating in each incarnation, though the Fifth is my favorite.

Anyway since the transformation fascinate me In was naturally drawn to the TF community. Mostly I was disappointed, much like fanmfiction it tends to be a matter of sifting through sands to find the precious few gems. Well, this day I found a gem without even looking.

You are starting at the end. Not used that often, with good reason. Most people cannot pull it off without embarassing themselves. I have never used it, my bruder used it once but he is far more talented than I.

You do it well. You construct the scene suspending our disbelief. The descripotions of the ship paint an image of fallen glory, of excellence giving way to "good enough." As for the crew Slippy is silent with the Jukebox indicating his record is skipping, he will have trouble. Those who work with machines like structure and logic in general, this madness will rub him the wrong way at a very bad time. Herr Hare, will be the one easiest able to cope. In my experience elders either excell at taking change in stride from living it, or are repelled by it. He strikes me as one who will roll with the punches and be the first to go on to acceptance and assistance. The light on him pretty well ibdicates intelligence and calm. Lombardi is a wild card, he is agressive by nature and responds to problems typically by facing them head on. He will cut the matter to the quick as indicated by his line of questioning. Lombardi's seeming repellance by evadng McCloud's presence is likely a result of frustration.

Lombardi has a method to deal with strangers, and a way to deal with McCloud. But here he finds the two one and the same. He will remain standoffish, shifting from aggression to retreat. Lombardi will like a soldier gather intelligence, and only then decide on the course of action.

As for our our protagonist, McCloud is the lead in, both narrator and subject of this tale. The mystery lies in the hands of the mystery. Like a lad watching the rooks assemble one only looks more intentky waiting for the answer to come forth.

Very well written and well done story. Was a pleasure to read it. Thanks for sharing.

HAHAHAHAHAHA!

This is funny as hell!

Heh, sorry it took so long. Finally got a chance to sit down and read this. So, as I promised, here's my thoughts. :3

I'll start by saying right now I LOVE transformation stories, transgender being no exception. Finding one on , and ones that are well composed, are rare. This story is an unappreciated gem only getting two other reviews and blammed off to the back pages way before its time. Can't help but suggest it might be more fun to upload one chapter a day to keep it in front view and develop some intrigue. Maybe I sound biased, but I like what I like!

Writing was pretty good. Only the usual spelling errors here and there, which no writer is immune to. Some paragraphs were a bit bland, and could be better spruced up without starting each sentence using the same pronoun. I know this story is done, just throwing out the idea for your future works. It's a habit I'm still trying to break. >^.^;< I also like how you separated your chapters. One to three thousand word chunks should be anyones target, in my opinion. It's the right size to be read in brief intervals without leaving plot holes across the countryside.

What can be said about plot? As a compilation of key events from a specific game, it certainly plays well to hardcore fans like myself. Only thing that really bothered me was a few loose ends that never got addressed. Biggest one being when Falco said he only had one question before accepting Fox's new self. Was a bit surprised there was no scene elaborating on that, since those two are supposed to be close friends. But a lovely touch, leaving seeds for a possible sequel too. Something that strikes me as odd in your Alternate Universe is Fox going from forty-something to mid-twenties and never noticed a difference age brings? But now I'm just rambling observations. It's even more disturbing that would mean the rest of Star Fox is now twice as old as her, with Peppy in his nineties. Unless I'm figuring this wrong... XD

Overall, I thoroughly enjoyed this story and hope you'll be writing more again soon, TF/TG or no. I'll even volunteer to beta-read! :3

I must say, this was a very pleasurable and enjoyable read - an interesting take on a well-used storyline that was well excecuted.

The timeline method was also effective - it didn't feel like there was a big gap, more of a passing from one key event to another. This makes the story feel very fluid plotwise, which I liked.

One thing I had a bit of a problem with was the way the paragraphs seemed choppy and broken up, way too short. I would find the story much more readable if the paragraphs flowed together more cleanly. Apart from that, the actual writing was very good, spelling very good (except sometimes the typo of 'flacon', which I too can sometimes be accused of), and an enjoyable read.

Obviously, concrit is a little pointless after the story is finished, but I suppose it's me hoping great things from another story from you.

-Stinger

A very intriguing Alternate Universe story, a unique twist as far as I know. This wouldn't happen to be inspired by the Action Replay code that switched Fox's model out for Krystal's in Adventures, would it?
Just a thought, but if you plan to do a sequel, you could have some fun messing with the recurring Fox & Wolf yaoi pairing.