really good

Please Continue this is great!

This was so sad... very well written, but very sad. Are you going to write anymore on this? Hope so; although Shadow of the Midnight Sun is much more uplifting, of course!

Please write more! You're really great at this, you capture the emotions and feelings of each character perfectly. It's almost as if Stephenie Meyer wrote this herself. In fact, I think I might cry...but anyways...Great Job...write more. :]

Really good, I love Alice's reaction. Everyone writes her as some shopping addict, it was a nice change.

Update soon!

This point of view of Edward's was well done.

It wasn't what I would think the exchange was, but it's good. You need a punctuation check, though.

-sighs and shakes head sadly- As far as I've seen, everybody on Fanfic needs a punctuation check.