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| Eagle2 2008-05-06 ch 1,  | abuseYou've captured the thoughts and feelings of every soldier going into battle. Awesome job! The only way to secure peace is through the roar of battle. |
| skywalker05 2008-05-05 ch 1, | abuseGood. You gave a good sense of the fear a soldier must live with, and your wording bordered on the poetic. I would have liked for the latter half--the clone's point of view--to have been longer; as is it feels a bit extraneous, tacked on to the description of war. Expanding it would be nice. Very good description and wording throughout. |
| Revan Dante 2008-05-05 ch 1, | abuseAs would I. |