do one long lesbian sex scene please or one long sex descriptive scene

wow, well to be hpnest i think i would laught at him to because of his undie. cant wait to see what happens though since it seems that both of them finally can see that htye have a thing for each other. hm does he like her or is falling hard for her hard.

thnx for the cahpie, was very hot...can't wait for the next chapie...j'a ne!

wo yeah! u wrote lol. I've been waitin for this forever! loved it! plz update plz...

i love it

aww...that was so sweet? yea...i'll go with that. Nice lemon! hope you update soon and IS THIS A HAPPY ENDING? cuz im gonna scream if it isn't

wow i can't wait to read more, please update really soon

i really like this story. its so different from anything i've ever read. update soon!

plz update!

When you wrote "It was obvious there was going to be bloodshed tonight. I have 10 on Raye."

Did you mean she would be the 1st to punch or bleed?

"...my current weight at…205! I’m only five pounds away from being in the 100’s!"

205

-5

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200

it should be "I’m only [six] pounds away from being in the 100’s!"

But I'm absolutely loving the story!

P.S. sorry it bothered me

P.P.S. Great story I can't wait for the next update!

P.P.P.S. I LOVED the

""I’d love to cover him in chocolate ice cream with caramel and marshmallow swirls with hot fudge and whipped cream and lick it off those abs"...“I’m sorry you feel that way Serena. Personally though, I’d use mint chocolate chip ice cream with dark chocolate syrup and don’t forget the cherries. Nothing says “Bang my brains out” like a bunch of red cherries all over naked flesh.”"

EK o ;)

So I've read both and I have to say I like this version better... it flows better and actually has more depth to it. I really look forward to the remainder of the rewrite.

lol this story makes me laugh

wow. nice! Hope to hear from you soon! Nice story! I haven't read the original one,but the revised one is really great. Good luck w/ your stories and update as fast as you can! A lot of people are reading your stories.

A nice update- hope another one is up soon!