lol, dont feel embarassed.. nobody here knows who you are:P

besides I think that it wasn't that bad.. have you read some of the stuff on here.. in fact in my opinion I think it was quite romantic:D
well done.. i dont find many well written one-shots so i was happy to find this, ur a great writer! Really incorporate emotions into ur story(i sound so intelligent:P)
anyways
thanks 4 the story

What in the world?!

Truthfully, I can't really put into words how I'm feeling at this point in time. I feel so teased and abused--all the while feeling sadistically satisfied with what I've read. At first, I think it's going to be something sweet and almost angsty... and then the story moves on to this completely different track of pent up passion and heated emotions. And just as we're getting into the flow here, you throw something completely unexpected and push the stop button and have Pan and Trunks controlling themselves. The most abusive part in this entire story is the end, where control is lost but I'm not even privy to see exactly how it ends!

I loved the teasing nature of this little piece, regardless of my insatiable want of knowing ALL of the little details behind Pan and Trunks' relationship at this point. You give just a bit of the background but leave everything else for people to piece together or imagine, which really adds to the seductive lure of the writing. Thanks so much for this interesting one-shot.

i absolutely loved this story or oneshot which ever you prefer to call it! loved it i just wish it went further...

*starry eyed*

I LOVE it! It's SO well written! I love how you display they're relationship. This story is definitely better than the ones I've written.

I love the fact that Trunks rolled off towards the end. =D I especially like the last two lines:

“I think you just don’t want to admit how untamed you are.”

“Untamed?” he grinned at her choice of words. “I guess you’re right.” And with that said, he pressed his lips against hers again.

I actually abhor when a couple's PDA but this is too adorable.

Oh, just a tiny correction: He heard her whisper a ‘thanks’, and he mumbled a ‘your welcome’ back to her. It's 'you're welcome,' not 'your.'

Other than that... *sighs* LOVE IT, LOVE IT, LOVE IT! I'm so very glad that you posted this one-shot and you shouldn't feel embarrased by your work.

I'm so adding this to my Fav. Stories!

Great job!

~*Eli

Hmm... I'm guess I'm sick and disgusting because I liked it. Ha, ha! But, there again, look at the story I'm currently writing... So, maybe that's why. Ha, ha! But, to be honest, I thought it was done in a very tasteful manner, not like the first chapter of my story where it was full-blown getting it on. Ha, ha! Really, I did like it, much like anything you write. And I really think you should continue this type of theme in your stories, if you want. You do it in a way that leaves a lot to the reader's imagination, you know? It as very maturely and respectfully written, and I liked it a lot. :] Good luck with future stories. :D Question: Was this a one-shot or are more chapters coming? Personally, I took it as a one-shot, but I'd love if you turned it into a story. :]

aww i liked it. :]

aha i know what you mean (in the authors note)

Man! This story was freakin sexy! I won't even lie you have a far better imagination than me... this TP story is way better than any TP i ever wrote

Haha... loved your authors note at the end... Despite what you think, I believe this was very well written - it's not bordering into the realms of smut or filth... It just seems... well, natural.

different from your other stories yet its a good kind of different =)