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| orangebubbles 2008-07-21 ch 4,  | abuseI can really relate to this. So many times I've been pushed into a guard while passing through idk... say the town square in the poor district in Acre and lo-and-behold! It was a madman that did it, while I'm running away from the guards, trying to find a rooftop garden or a bench or something to hide from them. I loved reading this ^^ |
| Lycan723 2008-07-02 ch 2, | abuseWoot!! I've never played Assassin's creed But that didn't stop me from enjoying the story! Vary nice job, Funny too! |
| 15animefreak15 2008-06-29 ch 4, | abuseHahaha, this is great. And those sort of things are annoying. You know what else I find annoying? Crossing over water on those poles. I mean, you'll aim for them, but sometimes go way off and SPLASH!! Desynchronize. Bleh. |
| Arcadia-sama 2008-06-21 ch 3, | abuseOh god, please, please, PLEASE continue this. I had to stop and take a break from it, I was laughing so hard! Most excellent, most excellent indeed! |
| Almas 2008-05-31 ch 3, | abuseomg story of my life while playing this game lol. funny with a serious tone i like it. ..beggars and the guys that shove you.. the worst. beggars messed up so many steathly assassinations for me haha. |
| yasha-fire-starter 2008-05-26 ch 3, | abuseI got so mad at the drunkards that would block the alleyway that I ended up just charging through it knocking everyone over. No deaths but very satisfying. |
| Aiden Skywalker 2008-05-07 ch 3, | abuseThe first thing I would like to point out is how much I love your word choice. The characterization also comes to my mind. The way you describe Altair's personality reminds me of a Sith... although that is just me. The only thing I have to say considering constructive criticism, is that in the first chapter, you do not describe physical appearance/personality for the drunk man or Altair in a way that is appealing to the reader. Maybe, if one is older/larger/taller, then you should use those to describe them instead of just "the drunk" and "the robed man". Just something to consider. |