I am absolutely loving this!! Wonderful writing! I hope to read more from you!!

I am finding this story an interesting challange to read. Most of what I know about the Ninja, Japan, and that way of life has been learned through fanfiction. I am really have to pull all that knowledge together to make full sense of the story. I also love how you aren't spoon feeding me with translations and explinations of things that I may not know at the end of the chapter.
That has got to be my favorite thing about this fic, trying to figure everything out in my head.
I think you've really got Mikey's personality down as well. Great job with that. I look forward to seeing more.
KUTGWUS (Keep Up The Great Work Update Soon)
Pretender Fanatic

::dies happy::

dear god i needed this! Alright. Takeshi trying to be patient with mike...its beautiful to watch, and i love his observations, and him coming to realize that mike is just like any other young, rambunctious, (if hyper active) student. I am intrigued by WHY he is teaching mike, exactly as it is driving mike crazy to know. "One enemy or another, one jonin or another, it does not matter. I am a part of something more important. I am ninja." I think that would take us back to the essence of what are ninja. All i know is that they serve a master in the shadows...but doesnt that mean killing all enemies? why keep mike alive and train him? or is it karai who ordered it? but it is so unlike karai...she seems more ' cut off your thieving fingers' type. i dunno.

Saeko is awesomeness in the making. i love her. adore her. im totally shipping her with don, and i dont ship the turtles with oc's. its cause you have awesome OCs. they are real. they should be real. i'd give my only kidney to see this on the screen. seriously.

I was literally clinging to my mouse by the end. and wanted to cry when it DID end. I want more. i crave for more, i want to know more cause everything is still riddled in mystery. everything is so dark (even that fact that mike smeared Klunk II on his forehead. hilarious, but dark at the same time.

MORE COUNTERPLAY!

im forever your fan.

Tri

OMFG, OH MY FRIGGIN GOD< like you so gotta write more, it ws brilliant, moeso, it was awesome! Oh, poor Mikey, he killed Klunk II. he's probably heartbroken! AW, man i hope Takeshi doesn't say something about his family because that would be wild. Mikey don't take threats too well. LOL.

Damn Takeshi

MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE

More injuries too! LOL *evil smile*

NO!! KLUNK II! o.o

O_O NO KLUNK II!
Great story though, I can't wait for the next chappie!

Firstly, I apologise for not being able to write a proper review, but I just want you to know that I truly enjoy this story--it gets more interesting as it progresses.

I love the interactions between Takeshi and Michelangelo. Characterizations for all characters involved are so wonderfully done. Also, the scene with Don and Saeko is one of my favourites in this chapter.

Great writing as always. Thank you!

The only good thing about getting the flu is being under house and room arrest so that i may not infect the populace with my contagious germs. Being stuck in one place and miserable has its quirks cause its an excuse to go online and FINALLY check out all the beautiful fics that i have been following.

And dear lord Tori you DELIVERED!

I dont know much of Usagi Yojimbo's world other than what I saw in the TMNT show, but I am now dreadfully curious about Saeko and Ichizo's backstory and what impact with these two misfits have on the plot. I want to know where in the world you pulled these characters from, because at first i assumed they were characters from the comics, but then saw your AN and realized differently. They seem comical, but knowing you there is something not so nice brewing and all characters are there for a reason. can't wait!

I like the bonding between jotaru and raph. it was sad how jotaru admitted things he would probably not to usagi (its easier to admit fears to someone you barely know than to someone you admire)...and then of COURSE you must leave that with a cliffhanger...with splinter collapsing...

3vil woman.

Every scene with mike and takeshi is like pulling the hair out of my arms. I want MORE, want to see the games that they play on each other. Mike was just so mike while he was singing, and takeshi was creepily kind. I think the most amazing scene was when mike thanked takeshi in japanese and the look in takeshi's eyes...superb writing tori...

Klunk II nearly gave me a coughing fit...literally. seriously, where the hell did you come up with this stuff? its so typical of mike, yet so insane it could only be MIKEY! Loved the reference to charlotte's web! The end scene with wakako searching for mike and takeshi revealing that he is protecting him from her...well, he is a strategic genius...is it staged to get mike to trust him?

Or is it staged but real at the same time? Takeshi KNOWS wakako wants to kill mike, and is using her so that he can get closer to mike. The woman doesnt come off to me as someone who can act very well.

Anyways, AWESOME chapter. Am dying for more. you have given reason for my sickness!

Tri

I knew it. That Ancient One is really one homely troll cherub sonofabitch. I always suspected. I don't care what his ultimate motivations are, or how deeply respect has been ingrained into Splinter, I hope Splinter throttles him for this little caper.

That said, I love this! I love Mikey's voice here, and the various strategies he comes up with to combat boredom and drive his keeper crazy. I love, love, love that Usagi's in this. Squee! He's not used often enough. I love the sense of doom hanging over Second Earth. These Enemies are frightening and they have not even been seen yet. I love the original characters, each a fully realized person.

I'll be waiting eagerly for more.

Unfortunately, I lost track of this fic for a bit, after just reading the first chapter. So I had a lot of good reading today. Holy crap, I was so afraid Mikey was really going to lose his thumbs! The fear here is so real! I feel bad for poor Mikey and for the rest of them freezing and then worrying about him another world away. Can't wait to find out what's happening with Mikey. The Ancient One must be out of his mind to do this to him.

Tori! I have to be quick or I'll be late for work, but I wanted to leave some comments before I forget them, because I love love love this story! Why is it that even though not much actually happened in these scenes, they held me riveted? I think it's the character interactions--the observations over sake, Raph's little moment with Jotaro, Mike naming and conversing with his little spider roomie... the seemingly effortless way you make these charaacters come alive, make the settings so detailed and natural. It is wonderful!

Cheers,
KT

That was really awesome, plz update soon!

I like it
i love it
so write me more of it
UPDATE SON!

Tori, I envy how fluidly you're able to blend two universes together AND original characters on top of that. It's practically seamless and is coming off beautifully.

Also, the scene with Raph and Jotaro was just adorable. If I were a better artist, I would totally draw it. It's very nice seeing that side of him. And I've always adored your Michelangelo- here is no exception.

Takeshi is quickly becoming a fascinating character. I hope to see more of him in the next chapter! :)

Oh, this is fascintating. Your OCs are wonderful, Takeo especially.

And I love CAPS-LOCK!Mikey. I admire the endless inventiveness that is your brain writing about Mikey locked in an empty closet. You made it -interesting-, and hilarious, and there were undercurrents there too...

And, ooh, the plot thickens. Your chapter endings are to die for! I'm pretty sure I've told you that before, though. I can't wait for the next part, I've got so many questions!