Reviews for Haiku for the Valar & the Valier

Reviews For: Haiku for the Valar & the Valier

eschaton37 2008-06-01 ch 1,	abuseI like Varda's, Yavanna's and Este's especially. I'm sure you know this already, but only Varda's is an actual haiku (5/7/5). Not that I mind, just saying. (Yavanna's could be if Valier was pronounced with 2 syllables, but I'm 99% sure it's 3 - val-ee-air. Orome's could be if "evil" was replaced with "night" or "orcs" or something monosyllabic.)
TheHouseOfTheGoldenFlower 2008-05-31 ch 1,	abuseEriala- That was a joke more than an offer. We know eachother in real life and all xD ~THOTGF
Eriala 2008-05-31 ch 3,	abuseAs usual, I liked these quite a bit. You obviously really know your Valar quite well; these are all very accurate descriptions. It was interesting how you tied Vaire and Mandos together by mentioning the tapestries in both poems. Reading all these really makes me wish I knew French. (However, I believe you have a typo: when you said “Kepper” did you mean “Keeper”...?) You seem to have gotten a beta offer already, but if you ever need another, I’m here. :)
TheHouseOfTheGoldenFlower 2008-05-31 ch 3,	abuse-says in english accent- Bravo, bravo!Like the Tulkas one! Are you planning on doing one for all the Valar/Valier? I can betta for you! xD ~THOTGF xD
Nariel Limbaear 2008-05-14 ch 1,	abuseWhen i saw haiku with Silimarillion, I cmae here to read ^^ I like a lot the haiku on Elbereth, but (i'm french) i see some wrong words in yours translations ^^' Just : "haleine" is not very beautyfull in french, but "souffle" will be better, i think. ("haleine" make me think to : a bad breath at morning xD)
Eriala 2008-05-10 ch 2,	abuseOk, where to begin? (I was never good with reviewing poetry since I can’t write it.) Each poem here summarizes its Vala nicely, and is expressive at the same time. You’ve captured the essence of the Valar in very few words. Haiku is sort of the poetic equivalent of a drabble: you don’t say much, but you get the point across. In terms of the two Nienna poems, I’m not sure which I like most. They are very similar in terms of words, but have quite different styles. I enjoyed the simplicity of the haiku. The French sounds lovely, even though I needed the translation to understand it. As a general rule, I either really like rhyming poetry or hate it; I love the first Nienna poem. You manage to rhyme without being tacky or trite, and it flows quite nicely. And, of course, I’m honored that you would write it for me. :) Are you only interested in the Valar, or do you also like elves? Because I’d like to hear what you think of some of my stories, if you were willing. Either way, I hope you’ll add more poems to this collection; I’ll be waiting.
Eriala 2008-05-08 ch 1,	abusethese were very pretty. i especially liked the one on manwe (the translation - i don't speak french). are you going to do one on nienna? i would like that. :) as for "those fancy accents" - do you have msword? if so, you can either go to insert>>symbol and find them, or else there are certain combinations of keys that you can press. in terms of formatting, i think it would have been easier if you had put lines to separate the poems (and the notes: the "o0o0o0o0" was kind of annoying.

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