Reviews for Sometime After

Reviews For: Sometime After

Lerrinus 2008-08-23 ch 1,	abuseWow! Sid stories are very rare on this site, even rarer is 2nd person POV and to find one that combines both with such a crystalline result? As rare as hens teeth, as Sid might say! Fave lines: - Deep below in the heat and heart of your city, their city, no one’s city. The deeps of the rock and strata and human geology. Surrounded by the heat, cold, burning, you live below with those who cannot live above. - Red liquid iron and formaldehyde smell. You carry it with you. It dries to your skin. Reminds you of who you are, and who you will be. - And somehow you never leave, not even when you do. Sunk into the stones now a part of the always and ever after. I also enjoyed the feather "breezing through the iodine air." Your story is an outstanding piece of writing, so descriptive, so...Sid! Keep up the great work, I look forward to more of your writing! :-) adds to faves
racefh853629 2008-07-15 ch 1,	abuseO... I liked it. Very evocative... definitely makes you think. Great job!
theAlyCat 2008-05-23 ch 1,	abuseI loved it! especially the description of the Red liquid iron and formaldehyde smell! great second person fic! :]
sarramaks 2008-05-09 ch 1,	abuseI liked it. It has the same stillness to it that I have seen in your other pieces. The descriptions were beautiful snap shots. I got a real sense of Sid and his thoughts, although I possibly found them too fragmented at times. "Silent story tellers, tale-bearers, died dreams to anyone who will listen. You listen and keep their company." I liked this line a lot. I think I see Sid differently to this fic. I see him as being more vibrant, and although passionate about science, I could also see him having a flamboyant alter ego. I challenge you to write a fluffy one shot that ends with everyone happy and alive :P
Blue Shadowdancer 2008-05-08 ch 1,	abuseI loved this, it was exactly Sid. I love the images you used, and the way you told the story through them, the 'red liquid iron and formaldehyde' and the 'iodine air'. I especially like the line 'your atoms shift and drift like dandelion clocks'. In fact, I could probably quote nearly every line, but I won't :) I also really like the story contained in this, with his life, and interactions with the team, talking to them even when they don't always listen properly, and the moment with the feather that he marvels at, and listening to the stories of those he carries out the autopsies on. A lovely end as well, with Stella, you write the understated but deep friendship between the two of them so well! Him so anchored into his place that he unintentionally doesn't ever leave, and 'a part of the always and ever after', and her taking away his glasses with her, were extremely poignant, as was 'a goodbye that in the end was not too late'. Please write more like this?
SallyJetson 2008-05-08 ch 1,	abuseThere are very few 2nd shot pieces and even fewer successful ones but this one I rate highly among the successful. Your flowing cadene and vivid imagery is ever present as you describe Sid to what I consider a T. I particularly love what this line says about Sid: 'And somehow you never leave, not even when you do.' his dedication not just to the job but to the fact that these dead bodies were once living, breathing human beings.
notesofwimsey 2008-05-08 ch 1,	abuseWhat a perfect evocation of the mysterious figure in the underground that is Sid Hammerback. I love the imagery tying him to the city structures of steel and concrete. The imagery is wonderful and so are the small glimpses of Sid's interactions with both the living and the dead. I love the ending as well - you capture so much in the line "Thanks that you never needed." Second person is a tricky POV (so overdone in lots of ways) - you handle it well, of course, but it works here for Sid's character as well. He seems to be unconnected in traditional ways. The POV simultaneously gives distance and connection. Experiment more!
ImaSupernaturalCSI 2008-05-08 ch 1,	abuseTotally awesome. Sid to a 'T'.
chrysalis escapist 2008-05-08 ch 1,	abuseOh! I LOVED IT! It was perfect! You captured Sid so perfectly (I'm slightly envious ;) ). I loved particularly:'You listen always and sometimes your own voice is lost. It rolls amongst the steel chill brushed metal of the room. They hear it sometime after in the muteness of their own thoughts.' Also 'But your voice is for life and its love' and the atoms shifting like dandelion clocks, such a beautiful image! And the last paragraph, I just loved every single letter of it! So mysterious, beautiful, quiet and sad! But I do hope this will not happen until MUCH time after ;)
marialisa 2008-05-08 ch 1,	abuseThe cadence of this piece of writing is wonderful, almost poetic, as his thoughts eddy and swirl in the stillness of the morgue. I didn't so much read this as feel it as I was swept along in the patterns you've created. Your imagery is amazing and there are so many examples I could choose but these struck me particularly: "You stand, never still, amongst those who are forever out of the dance of life. You care for them, and for some you are the only one who ever has and ever will" "Deep below in the heat and heart of your city, their city, no one’s city" "And somehow you never leave, not even when you do. Sunk into the stones now a part of the always and ever after." There are so many more I could choose! The ending was bitter sweet and perfectly judged. If this is what we get when you experiment I say experiment some more! Truly beautiful writing :)
Shining Zephyr 2008-05-08 ch 1,	abuseInteresting. I myself have never down second person POV either, and it was something different to read, Lily! I think you did really well with this! Nice job! ~Shiny-sama

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