This is much better than the normal endings LOL

Now this is how it should have ended

SO much better than the endings of the game.
There's actually a good twist and a bad twist, along with a neutral shard that is actually differed from the evil conclusion, unlike in the game.
Well done!

This is a truly marvelous piece of work. The endings you came up with should have been the ones that closed out Bioshock. Fontaine's speech at the begining was impressive and what happens to the little sisters and Tenenbaum was a stroke of genius. Truly the best Bioshock fic i've read yet. Keep it up cuz you got yourself a fan. Best of luck to your future fics.
Sincerely, Darth Azrael

Wow... just... wow. This should have been an ending in BioShock; it would have been fucking amazing to see animated.

Not bad...Fontaine's dialogue is pretty good, with the exception of, "Or maybe you just chose to be a slave. Is he that chooses to be a slave a man… or is he a slave?" It's a little silly. He seems to dwell on Ryan's final words too much. The one thing that pissed me off about Bioshock, were the endings and the credits (the hell?). His aren't much better. I'm surprised on mr. Ken Levine's behalf, despite the great subtlety and maturity of Bioshock, the 2 endings deny one IMPORTANT THING. Motive. Yes. I killed the Little Sisters. But not for power, or ADAM, but because it was the right thing to do (or so I thought at the time). Mercy killings. If I "saved" these little sisters, then what? Where would they go? They would just be brutally murdered, especially without their protectors. At the time, to me, Tennenbaum was a pathetic excuse of a human being, and I desperately wanted to save Atlas's family. I believe Steinman's audio diary describes my feelings well. So what was I doing? Sending them to heaven, sacrificing my soul for theirs. Then...half way through the game, upon entering Tenenbaum's safe house, I realized they had a safe haven. Someone to look after them. I had a change of heart, and saved every little sister after that. And yet...I still got the rediculously evil ending. Bullshit. At the end of the game, you're either a saint, or satan. That's retarded. Although the good ending is a lot better than the bad.

I remember reading his on DA. I waited so long for it to be posted here because it was Bioshock ending that was wonderful and made sense.

I thought this ending was almost better than the original one as it goes into greater detail of what happens to Jack, when he chooses love over power he lives the rest of his life with Tenenbaum and the little sisters helping them grow up and live their lives free of fear. But in the bad ending he chooses power over love and spends his life in Rapture alone with all the power he could ever imagine

I always thaught the endings to the game were a little (VERY a little) anti-climactic. Apparently you did not write this but tell Lieunacy they did a damn good job.