not bad .

good story and funny

Is Paul talking to his brother at the end?
(and yes, I do understand the Japanese, I just find it easier to use English)
How does his Electabuzz know to act like Pikachu?
Anyways, I like it :) So cute!

that made me laugh so much XDD
Shinji is so awesome XDD

~xy.xo~

Lolz... I enjoyed reading this and picturing it in my head, really! XD

-Samia

roflrofl
xP
Poor Dawn
and... Paul.
lol

Completely adorable ^^ Love your work!

OMG, I just love it so much! Can you do it once more, the last one??! I just want to see how Satoshi and the other would act after seeing THAT~!

That... was extremely disturbing.

Not what I had in mind when reading the summary, but enjoyable all the same!
Poor, poor Hikari~

I prefer it as Denji as well. ^^

A few spelling mistakes here and there, confusion between words that sound similar but are different in meaning, but nothing major.

...he did...what..satoshi...did...omg...OMG!! Its worse enough that SATOSHI DOES THAT STUPID POSE, HE DID IT TOO!! I can see why she did that to shinji. I would have attacked him too. Then get satoshi. ATTACK!! MWUAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!

lol! this could quickly become a series of very funny oneshots. lol luv it lol! rofl! -dying laughing- It's funny that his pokemon act like pikachu too. why'd he keep the bibarel, though? lolz.

Actually, I do understand you writing "Denji" instead of "Denji" seeing as it would go "shi -> ji" and technically there's no zi D: It's hard to tell; sometimes they have to make it different because they just don't have the characters for it >< Ah well xD

This was another really cute story. I could totally imagine Hikari kicking Shinji for picking on her like that xDD

XD That was too funny. Too bad Shinji got kicked though. X)

Lol hilarious. I would of freaked out too...just imagining Shinji doing that is...-shivers- Great job man.

oh, good sequel! It was so funny! Very funny to how shinji keeps getting distracted by hikari's outfit, hoi imagine if he was there when hikari was doing those high kicks in maylene's gym?
( pom-pom censorship?) I hope you write more soon! Your such a awesome writer! XD