wow how long have u been studying english if it isn't ur native tongue? your english is very good! i like the idea of the story and am a huge SS/HG fan my only criticism is the dialogue sounds a little fake/cheesy on Krum's part, not all of it but some of his lines don't seem to fit. but other then that i think this was a really cool first chapter

Its very good. Some formating problems. I think so far it is interesting. I'm curious as to what set her off. I would like you to keep working on it and posting please.