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| Flame Rising 2008-05-10 ch 1,  | abuseCongratulations. You should feel very honored. Why, might you ask? Well, I’ll tell you. Your story has earned the distinction of being placed into my respected and revered C2. With nearly 200 subscribers, it portrays the very best examples of its genre. Who am I? Well, I am a very humble reviewer of fan fiction with a small forum right here on the site. Now just because you have earned this honor from me, I hope you will not slack off and rest on your laurels. Please continue to produce stories of this caliber so that I can add them to my C2. Best regards, F/R |
| Saotome Yoshimi 2008-05-10 ch 1, | abuseThank you for NOT writing about Naruto in American-style high school - that seems to be the running theme with fan fics. They are ninja...they do ninja things. You are creative. Were I to offer anything constructive, I'd say to add a bit more polish to your writing. Use paragraphs - for example, whenever you have a new speaker, its a new paragraph. My eyes tended to glaze over it and I found myself wanting to skip a lot because it was all running together. Just breaking things up into paragraphs would help tremendoulsy. Also, another example: Your sentence: After two days of walking at a pace where they didn't need a break to rest they finally arrived at the village. Clarification: After two days of walking at a normal pace, they finally arrived at the village. But I like your style. And your imagination. You're pretty good. |