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Hi xxfatal!

Just looked at your first installment of Restorative. A very nice opening scene. I questioned Naruto's unhealed scar given his Kyuubi healing ability, but then again, I don't yet know what he's been through.

Don't put yourself down! Your writing is clear and easy to follow for the most part. I would be careful with transition and sentences. I didn't quite follow why Hinata was confused to be at Ichiraku's shop. The sentence explaining how Tsunade sent Hinata away shifted from Hinata's thoughts to Tsunade. I would suggest 'Tsunade shooed her away gently, certain that Hinata...'

Don't worry about capturing the characters. Let 'em go and they'll live for you! I think you've done nicely with Hinata thus far. I especially liked her interlude with the unconcious Naruto. Just remember that she doesn't blush all of the time. ;) I haven't seen how you write Naruto yet, but I'm looking forward to it!

Good chapter. I actually think Kurenai being subdued makes sense, what with everything that's happened to her.

'Have you seen a doctor...?' Shino's question in my mind was a little strange, considering I didn't think there WERE doctors in the Naruto world, but medic-nin.

Perhaps I'm wrong. I might google awhile to be sure. But that is, quite honestly, the only thing I didn't like in this. Another nicely written chapter, but a short one, I'll admit! :P

I want to take a stab here...it's Asuma's baby, right? And that explains Ino's and Shikamaru's appearances...but not Chouji's absence??

Can't wait for your next chapter! The plot is thickening...

Very well done, so far! Keep doing what you're doing, I'm looking forward to more!

I love this story so far. Hinata is so kind, and I love it when it shows in stories. I never got Kurenai much, either. I like her, but her character is very vague. Still, you did a good job. I can't wait for the next chapter, and I can't believe you haven't gotten more reviews for this story!

this seems pretty interesting so far. Please continue!

I like your writing style and the story idea seems quite interesting. It's true that some of the characters are a bit OOC at times (Kurenai is indeed really hard to grasp, and I understand Naruto's reactions after learning something like that) but the whole result is pretty satisfying ^__^

I'll be looking for more of your updates. Keep up the good job.

She does seem a bit subdued in this chapter. However, given the circumstances, who can blame her? Tough times for everyone, after what happened to Asuma...

Mhm. Good updates, and no worries! Life comes first :P

And you said you thought it was bad. Pluh. I bloody loved it to pieces. You keep Hinata and those guys like the real thing. KEEP GOING!!

*sob*

Poor, poor Jiraiya... I'd forgotten he'd died in the manga... (Unless more recent chapters prove otherwise...)

I loved Kiba's reaction to Hinata running with her eyes closed... I really loved it... -insert heart here-

But... doesn't Sakura call Tsunade "Tsunade-shishou"?

And cliffy-ness! Cliffy-ness! Is this the first cliffy you left us on FF?

(Ah, yes... Will there be a triangle with Sakura and Naruto and Hinata, or will Sakura just be a good friend and, like, try to cheer Naruto up, causing people to misunderstand?)

Love and Scribbles,
Ruffle

P.S. Yeah... This wasn't too long... But I have to go to church in ten minutes, and I still haven't gotten dressed yet!

wow, i amazed at how well you got into hinata's head. so many people want to dwell on the shyness and insecurities; but your hinata's overcoming those really well.

not to mention that everyone else is coming across extremely canon too! =D

I understand what you mean about getting a character 'just right'. But OOC-ness I think, can be justified with enough patience. Say an author chooses to write an outgoing, sure-of-herself Hinata (which so many do, but often fail to do so convincingly). To pull that off they'd need to take their audience through a process of changing for the girl. I mean she's human and no stuttering love-struck teen is turned into a kick-arse ninja, without some kind of huge event, or an on-going of events occurring in her life.

I wouldn't be too worried about it though. Your Hinata mightn't stutter so much, but she's certainly still blushing like crazy and crazy about the same blonde-headed Naruto.

Sorry to ramble, but I wasn't expecting this to be as good as it is! Truly. You've surprised me.

Anywho, kudos. I urge to keep writing! :P

Great job. Naruto is so adorable in this chapter, I really felt for him. And you've done a wonderful job with Hinata's insecurity. I do love what little we've seen of Team 8 together so far, I hope to see more of it! :)

I think you nailed Hinata's character. She's shy, but not cowardly (like some authors seem to make her out to be), and of the little description of Naruto so far, he certainly seems more in character than you give yourself credit for.

And I agree, Naruto and Hinata are very hard to write for such popular characters =x
Just keep in mind of Hinata's inner bravery/strength, as well as Naruto's ability to be mature when the situation calls for it, and I think you'll be fine.

Also, regarding someone's mention of Hinata's stuttering... I don't think it's necessary. Once in a while, maybe, but as of the latest chapters in the manga, her stuttering is almost entirely gone. She certainly isn't close to fainting anymore, either.

Hope that helps :D :D