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Reviews For: Seeing Red

Capegio 2008-05-16 ch 1,	abuseOoh, I loved that last one. It took me a second to figure out what you were referring to, but when I got it, that was a big punch. Edmund is very thoughtful, so it was really in character, too. And I loved your diction when you wrote about the fireflower cordial. Very vivid and lovely.
Love and Rock Music 2008-05-15 ch 1,	abuseOoh, I liked this very much. Every one of your associations with the color red fit perfectly with Edmund's character, and it was very well done. When you talked about how Lucy finds it odd that Edmund associates red with Narnia, as opposed to gold and light, I was reminded of a passage from The Lost Colony, in which Artemis sees a fiery pit of magma and compares it to a lake of blood. Then he asks himself something to the effect of, "What does it say about my personality, that 'a lake of blood' is the best metaphor I can come up with?" (that's a bit of paraphrasing, as I can't find my book at the moment). I thought it was very similar to what you've done here: Everything made sense within Edmund's experiences and mindset. I loved the direct contrast between fire and ice - it was nicely expressed, and not overemphasized the way Narnian fiction tends to do. (I hate how fiction insists on villanizing him well after LWW.) Likening Lucy's cordial to life was also very good, and I enjoyed the fresh idea about Edmund's electric torch - taking home the chess knight instead? Brilliant! (Unless you meant that figuratively. . . ) The ending was lovely. I must give credit that you went a wrote the story and managed to avoid the anger and negative connotation of "seeing red". The one bit I didn't like was Edmund referring to England as "Spare Oom". If he's at the train station in the present, he wouldn't be under that impression any longer, and be in full possession of the memories of their lives before and after LWW once more. Great job!
Val Evenstar 2008-05-12 ch 1,	abuseThis was obviously very well thought out. Great job - vibrant description, long enough to satisfy but short enough to keep the effect powerful. Very well written.
KCS 2008-05-11 ch 1,	abuseI say, you get better and better with each of these! I'm in a drabble series myself in my own fandom, and I can completely sympathise how hard it is to trim down to 100 words. And it never sounded like you were trimming, it flowed beautifully. Wonderful imagery, I loved this one!
Miniver 2008-05-11 ch 1,	abuseThis one's your best yet on all counts: innovation, structure, detail, vividness, emotional truth, and the way it leads us through loss and danger to the bright end. I'm tearing up as I finish it. I've never even thought of imagining Edmund's healing from his viewpoint; you do it with both realism and poetry. The element that I suspect is the spoiler is a beautiful touch, and if it's from the movie, bravo to the movie! (Since you didn't identify it, I won't.) Your final paragraph is beyond any words I could summon to praise it. I noticed, by the way, that counting the introduction, there are seven paragraphs to match the number of books. You've done justice (pun intended) to Edmund and to Narnia.
acacia59601 2008-05-11 ch 1,	abuseInteresting story! I like how everything tied together so well.

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