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| Arcole 2008-05-22 ch 1, | abuse"They are always moving. But within that movement, he is learning to find stability." I picked this out to quote b/c it is such a great thought--so Simon, so true. Then as I read I found more and more and more of them. I think you've got this prompt pegged just perfectly. River, Wash, Zoe, Simon--even Serenity herself. In my opinion, this is one of the best things I've read of yours for just pure beauty of language and sharp insight into character. I really, really love it. Bunches. |
| jane0904 2008-05-12 ch 1, | abuseBut this isn't complete! It needs Kaylee, with her bright disposition, seeing the good in everyone, and taking the travel as a way to see moreof that. Inara, who like Simon, is travelling because she has no choice, to get away from someone. Jayne, who travels knowing that if he stays put he'll die, probably from a bullet or at the end of a rope. But mostly Mal. Because he's still flyin', and that's enough. |
| twilight seeker3 2008-05-11 ch 1, | abuseVery well done. I like the structure of this piece. I love that the end is Serenity herself. gentle journey, twi |