Reviews for Flip of a Coin

Reviews For: Flip of a Coin

Lehst 2008-05-28 ch 1,	abusegrins that was cute. i like all the humorous bits, they really keep the setting intact.
Atemu'sLotus 2008-05-28 ch 1,	abuseAww... It's a hard decision... I believe that I shall vote for you. Twas cute. Great job! Thanks for writing!!
that guy 2008-05-12 ch 1, anon.	abusepretty good! i liked how good you got their personalitys down. but i think you shoulda done some more than just edwards crush on spike...anyways it was good! now gimme back my notebook, ryuk!
DarkLight's Pen 2008-05-12 ch 1,	abuseNot bad, a few spelling mistakes, but a more believable story than mine. Good job...
Kage_No_Shi 2008-05-11 ch 1, anon.	abuseI liked it. It wasn't really a 'leads anywhere' type of short story, but it was nice (kind of sweet). For a guy who 'hates kids', he is pretty nice to Ed here. Since when does Ed blush in a crush-like way? She often has those 'cheery red cheeks'...It is kind of hard to imagine her embarrassed. But hey, it is your scenario, so imagine what you like. Like Droid stated, spelling is an issue (but you were never that great at spelling). Oh, and you might want to write a story with original characters...You'll get tired of writing fanfiction eventually, and want to branch out...right?
Capn Droid 2008-05-11 ch 1, anon.	abuseYou should put more originality and imagination into your writing; I wouldn't suggest using anime characters all the time. Especially the ones you're obsessed with, seeing as you'll write hundreds about them. >->; Create your own characters. Think about anything that could possibly be perfected about your favorite anime character. Then, make a new character out of it. It's very easy. Just think of perfections, then a random name, and there you go. Seriously, it's easy. If you cba to do that, you cba to write a story. Additionally, type up your story in Microsoft Word, and use a Spell + Grammar Check before you copypaste it onto the website. Proper spelling and grammar makes the reader care about the story. I'm sure you've noticed several people just skip the story altogether, me being one of them. In addition to the anime thing, improper spelling scared them off. As a small but unnecessary tip, I suggest using better word choice in your sentences, to especially spice things up. TRY TO AVOID HUMONGOUS YELLING SCENES LIKE THIS BECAUSE IT'S A BLOODY EYESORE AND IT RUINS THE FEELING ANYWAYS! So yeah. There you have it!
Phantasm 2008-05-11 ch 1, anon.	abusePretty good writing for that scenario, I think it captured the characters pretty well.

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