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EdgeofDarkness 2008-08-27 ch 15,	abuselove it! itd awsome, really it is. i love your writing style!!
elfwarrior87 2008-08-24 ch 15,	abuseKenneth is such a strong character in the story. It's intresting to see a good original character out in front. I like how poor kenneth is in love with Remus just doesn't realize it yet.
els 2008-08-23 ch 15, anon.	abusewonderful absolutely wonderful. i absolutely LUV this story. Keep it up thanks els
BookWormNiri 2008-08-23 ch 15,	abuseI really like this. I feel like it doesn't get the recognition it needs beucase its not a main pairing instead its based around a OC, but still its really well planned out, and you have a lot of development of Kenneth's character. I do, however, feel like you need to edit your stuff a bit more carefully, there are a lot of cases where your sentences don't make sense or are missing a word. I can still understand what you are saying...but it would be better to edit again and make sure that it flows and is easy to read. Try getting a Beta, maybe.
BlackDove-alchemist 2008-08-23 ch 15,	abuseAww...poor, poor remus. Well written as always. And are you naming your chapters after songs, or is it just coincidence? (And if you've already said this, please ignore me)
discontinued-me 2008-08-23 ch 15,	abusePoor Kenneth--a big hunk o' wolf-love curled up beside him, and he can't do anything about it. Ah well, all in good time, I suppose. I really liked how you handled Sirus' death--I was a bit worried about that, but now I can see my worry was unfounded--which was to be expected; I've come to love all of your HP fanfictions. I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
Icarus Malfoy 2008-08-19 ch 14,	abuseOh dear.. The battle... Eep! Sirius is going to die next chapter, isn't he? Poor Remus. And what's Lucius going to do? Whatever he does, I can't hate him, Jason Isaacs made me adore him. Great chapter!
els 2008-08-19 ch 14, anon.	abuseow a cliffy, nice one. athough I must say I'm not to happy that Sirius died, like reliving bad memories. ah it's alright I'm happy with everything else. thanks Els
VioletLewis 2008-08-19 ch 14,	abuseAnother chapter after a day, thanks!! Just what I needed after a tiring day at school. I've seldom read a fic like this. Most people just stick the two main characters together, write a couple slashy scenes, suddenly add a huge fight and at last a happy ending. I suppose the reason you haven't gotten that many review yet is just that - people expect to read plotless romance and a lot even especially look for that.Which is stupid. I love the way the relationship with Remus and Kenneth is getting more tense all the time and how Sirius is adding more strain to it! The kiss in the last chapter was just perfect. What I'm only wondering about is what Remus sees in Sirius. Obviously, he's liked him for a long time, probably since school, but Sirius can be so annoying! Kenneth has so many more qualities I could see Remus fall for. The end of this chapter (14) was awesome! Things should really get exciting from here! Your Lucius seems like an interesting character! I can't wait to meet him! And from what I picked up, Sirius must have died. Pity, although I can't really feel that bad about it. Just for some critique, I'd like there to be a bit more dialogue. You tend to write very long dicriptive paragraphs which can sometimes get a bit tiring. More dialogue here and there would make it more comfortable to read. I hope this review was long enough to make up for not reviewing most of the previous ones! I am an avid reader of this fic; I'm just not a reviewing person, just so you know! By the way, how come you stopped posting this at livejournal?
BlackDove-alchemist 2008-08-16 ch 13,	abusecool chapter, even if it is a filler.
els 2008-08-16 ch 13, anon.	abuseYay! you updated! This is really good, I don't care if the chapters are short keep em coming.
els 2008-08-16 ch 12, anon.	abusehey i really like this story please update els
Violet 2008-08-14 ch 12, anon.	abuseI really love your Remus. He's just the way I display him in fan fiction myself! I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
BlackDove-alchemist 2008-08-05 ch 12,	abuseawesome as always, just one thing you missed. You had "and despite how rude he could be sometime people seemed to like him." should it be somehow?
The Quibbler Awards 2008-08-04 ch 1,	abuseCongrats! Your story "Unleashed" was nominated for Best WIP and Best Slash at The Quibbler Awards. Before your story can be considered a nominee, though, we need your permission. Please contact us on our site or email us! The Quibbler Awards quibbler[dot]this-paradise[dot]com quibbler[at]this-paradise[dot]com

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