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| JazminePeneope 2008-09-07 ch 5, anon. | abuseWait... wouldnt fang be the prophecy kid?? He was born on January 1st and she was born on January 25th and if he wasnt, percy was born on January 23... before max... I like the idea of the story, that she is the prophecy kid, but first of all, Percy so does not sound like himself niether does Annabeth. Annabeth wants to be on the quest more then Percy does... idk it doesnt sound like them... if it were me id make some changes |
| Wingz are me17 2008-07-26 ch 5,  | abuseumm. i think u got fangs and maxs bdays backwards. please updaate.:-( |
| jeez 2008-07-24 ch 5, anon. | abuseI like the main idea. Max seems more like a punch-your-lights-out kind of person, not like a slapping person. There is also too much repetition. |
| Enchanting Elf 2008-07-11 ch 5, | abuseNot bad. Could stand to add a little more detail, don't try and rush the plot! Are you going to the the flock's godly parents claim them?( you know like when Percy was claimed in the first book) Keep updating !(: |
| QuickStar 2008-07-01 ch 5, | abuseGetting wings - hell Running Away - exhaustion and paranoia Talking dog - drolling and lots of whining Finding out your demi god - ... More hell ... Hmm the first one was funny Gawh Hehe Percy sucks |
| GreenAwesomeness 2008-06-29 ch 5, | abuseI wanted to say that Max is supposed to be the oldest, not Fang. |
| saphira 2008-06-07 ch 5, anon. | abusenot bad |
| xXForeverxLostxInxAxDreamXx 2008-06-07 ch 5, | abuseThat was better, though would it kill you to make it longer? |
| Rydon-Exists 2008-06-05 ch 5, | abuseWho is the parental unit, I wonder? |
| pawpaw 2008-06-05 ch 5, anon. | abuserandome much |
| FreeFaller0426 2008-06-05 ch 5, | abusewait. isn't Max OLDER than Fang by four months according to "the Angel Experiment"? |
| blackrosestarlight 2008-06-05 ch 5, | abusegrate ch. sorry i did review tell now i wasnt on . write on! -rose |
| Fangalicious 2008-06-02 ch 4, | abuseAs much as I love Maximum Ride and Percy Jackson, this story isn't one of the greatest i've ever read, but it's not bad. On a scale of one to ten, one being the worst, i'd say this would be a 6 or 7. |
| Rydon-Exists 2008-06-01 ch 4, | abuseInteresting plotline! =] |
| xXForeverxLostxInxAxDreamXx 2008-06-01 ch 2, | abuseSeriusly, the whole percy thing is out of character. The rest is good but you really need o work on the lightning theif part |