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| DekaFire 2008-06-05 ch 5, anon. | abuseWow. This entire fic is horrid. Your spelling is bad, your grammar sucks, you can't even format your story in a readable fashion, and you seem to know next to nothing about Evangelion. Writing about yourself is fine; just keep it to yourself. No one wants to hear about your deluded, self-satisfying fantasies of grandeur. |
| straightedgebigevil 2008-06-04 ch 5,  | abuseKeep up the good brother man |
| animefan29 2008-06-04 ch 5, | abuseOk I liked the little battle with the Necroface and Asuka and Rei getting dragons. Overall very good and I am glad you are changing the Tokyo-2 mistake, but there is another you should know. The 4th child was Touji, not Kensuki. |
| straightedgebigevil 2008-05-29 ch 4, | abuseTriple threat man what will you think of next? Shinji and the undertaker lol!( I was joking ) keep up the good work |
| animefan29 2008-05-29 ch 4, | abusepersonally I liked how you added the E-Heros. And again I must tell you that they are in Tokyo-3 not Tokyo-2. |
| animefan29 2008-05-22 ch 3, | abuseVery good duel. I just noticed that you are calling the entry plug a plug-in. |
| animefan29 2008-05-22 ch 2, | abuseThat was a very anime style duel you thought up. Gotta wonder who gets the third dragon though. |
| animefan29 2008-05-22 ch 1, | abuseHm...Interesting concept. Your writing style feels a little rough/awkward to me. But that is just an opinion. Overall I am interested in reading this story. There are some facts that you have wrong. A millennia is one thousand years. So ten thousand years is 10 millennia, not 2. A second fact that you have wrong, which could just be a typo, is where you say the viewer will keep the Angels out of Tokyo-2. The Angels are going after Tokyo-3 not 2. And just a suggestion, but whenever you introduce an OC that will have a significant role in a story, you should describe what they look like. |
| straightedgebigevil 2008-05-14 ch 1, | abuseMy young brother that sucks that your brother is gone. mixing eva with big o and yugioh waking the dragons is great but where are you going with this keep up the good work |