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Mr. Lee 2008-07-31 ch 3,	abuseHey there old friend :). I checked out the final chapter, finally LMAO XD. Screw it up?!? Kami forbid! You did a great job as always. As I mentioned last chapter, I had a feeling that Misato's sin against Shinji would surprise me, and you certainly did not dissapoint. What she did was very un-Misato like since it was Shinji she did it to. But I can understand her reasoning, even though she nearly borderline raped the boy. You can't hurry love, as the classic song goes. I'm glad that everything was settled nicely and that they can live normally as just two hormonal teens. But I expect no less from the coffee drinking ShinjixMisato Canadian king :)! Try to say that five times fast ROTFLMAO XD. Well, I'm not sure what you'll come up with for your next project. But I'm sure it'll be quality stuff. Until then, may the gods continue to be in your favor, my good friend. Later for now :).
Genomaxis_4005 2008-07-23 ch 3, anon.	abuseScrew this up, no way. I whole-heartily enjoyed this conclusion. It's good to be complete. I'm kinda surprised about what happened between Shinji and Misato though. But they are human and stuff happens I guess, though odd time for it. Shinji though... I think he could have swung either way. He could have taken the chance or ran, it was a 50/50 shot and this one he ran. But anyway it's great that they cleared the air between them and got together. You know I got an odd image while reading this; I was seeing Shinji and Misato dancing to the song Forever Young by Alphaville in front of that fountain but at night, I know odd thing to think of but hey it happens. Anyway yeah good job and thanks for writing this wonderful story.
¿ 2008-07-22 ch 3, anon.	abuseThis is cute. It wanders a bit but it's cute. I don't think Shinji would have resisted, either at 14 or at 16, if she had ever made a serious attempt at seduction, though. I always thought he was very attracted to her. A certain scene in End of Evangelion demonstrates that he's a horny little SOB, too.
Major Mike Powell III 2008-07-22 ch 3,	abuseWell, well, soldier... What are you talkin' about, son? Screwin' this up? This was AW3SOME! Fluff, fluff and nothin' more than FLUFF. 'Loved this shit. Helluva job, marine! 'Glad to have followed this fic from the start. 'Til next time. Semper-Fi! Carry on!
orionpax09 2008-07-22 ch 3,	abuseI'm glad that things finally worked out between Shinji and Misato. After all the misery and self-hatred the two of them have experienced, especially with that incident after Misato being sick, I guess I can understand them having trouble. But now, they're putting aside the past, and moving forward. I think they'll be okay now. All in all, an excellant story, Fifth Horseman. About the only gripe I have is that I would have liked to have seen just a little more fluff. But that is a very small complaint in the face of an excellant story. Thank you, and as always, I look forward to your next effort.
Tobi the good boy 2008-07-22 ch 3, anon.	abuseScrew it up? What are you talking about? Do you even read your own work? If I could write half as well as you do I would have been at least twenty or so placements higher in my class. As I have said in the past, you are one of about the five or six people on this entire site that can properly write Misato as a character. I'm not joking when I say that I wish you, Mr Lee, orionpax09, gunman, Shekron Kaizar, Mordamir and Lord Raa would get together and write a guide on how to properly write her character. Most people make her in to some kind of sleezy booze hound that is unfit to command toy robots, much less Eva at war with the Angels. You make her a real character, someone that people can understand and even relate to at some degree. I cant wait for your next story, so until then Ja Ne! Tobi's a good boy!
Hobbes221 2008-07-22 ch 3,	abuseWell Done! One of the best fics that I have come across in a long time. And one of the few Shinji/Misato fics to have a happy ending. Great job and I hope to see more of your work soon. (You could always kick out some one shots to tag along with this fic, wouldn't mind in the least)
Danyman 2008-07-02 ch 2, anon.	abuseGood story update soon if not we will have to release a furious asuka on you.
Chrisarmando 2008-06-23 ch 2,	abuseIt is sometimes hard to find Shinji/Misato stories, nowadays, but this one was quite rewarding to read. I've seen maybe one or two stories that make Misato younger in a pairing with Shinji, however, I like how you pulled it off. It was also enoyable to read how you described Shinji's thoughts. In short you were very decriptive. A job well done, and I can't wait to see the next chapter.
ATOMIC.SQUIRREL 2008-06-12 ch 2,	abuseWell, Fifth Horseman is back with his traditional M/S. I have to say, this is very good. Of course, simply saying that won't suffice, and seeing this story only has 18 reviews, i thought it deserved another one. Everything is great, really. I can only ever complain that you tell certain things instead of showing them (You can hazard a guess of which one) but it's mostly cause I'm a fucking pervert. Overall, i really love it when you post something. I might recommend having smaller chapters (Helps space out the reading)but other than that, take all the time you need. We knew your stuff is quality. Good luck, Squirrel
dark drow 2008-06-12 ch 2, anon.	abuse@ chapter 2 authers note great please dont rush it :P thank you for writing, i sincerly enjoy reading your stories ^_^ you said you allready have chap 3 in mind so me and your readers will wait with bated breath and tense anticpation xD, were hooked! please continue whenever you can =3
Mr. Lee 2008-06-09 ch 2,	abuseHey old friend :). Sorry I didn't review sooner, you know how life is. Well, great chapter as usual. Though I am curious about this awkward situation that happened between Shinji and Misato in the past to cause this tension between them (That stupid anniversary ceremony notwithstanding. Damn politicians x(!). The fact that they are living seperately is a big red flag to me. I think I can guess what it is, but I'll wait until you bring out the last chapter. Knowing you, you'll probably catch me off guard LMAO XD. The only thing I noticed that normally isn't like you is that you didn't mention Gendo's fate. You're normally thorough on things like this. After what happened in chapter 1, I think we would want to know if got his comeuppance. Oh well, it's a minor issue, so no worries. See you next chapter Shinji/Misato king. Later for now :).
orionpax09 2008-06-09 ch 2,	abuseExquisite. I don't really know what to say, Fifth Horseman. You have long since established the standard by which all Shinji/Misato stories are measured, and as always, it is a treat to see another chapter for this story. It makes sense that Asuka would mature in the way she has, given everything that happened, and your depiction of the reluctance Shinji, Misato, and Asuka have in regards to this anniversary is very accurate. It reminds me of how some soldiers lock away every medal they earn as a result of their tour of duties. It's not that they aren't proud of what they did, but rather that recalling what they did is painful for them, because of the consequences of their actions. In the end, all I can say is that this is an excellant story, and that I can only wish you the best in all of your future endeavors. Until the next chapter, then.
Riko Ozaki 2008-06-08 ch 2,	abuseHello again Horseman WRITE MOAR, PREASE!! 'aah don't beat me!' Seriously, another little gem of a chapter. I especially liked: ‘Naked on a beach, with Misato’s original body, which is also naked.’ Panic threatened to overtake his brain. ‘What the hell do I do now?’ I think you have captured the essance of both Shinji and Misato so well that I feel like this is a continuation of Evangelion from Gainax. And the way you dealt with Auska, that was a nice touch, and smoothly done. She has changed but the real Auska is still there, if somewhat muted. Description again was excellent, I could almost see Misato on that balcony streaching her arms towards the sky. And the scene with Shinji at the memorial, I know how that feels. I had to attend a function and be put upon the stage to be gawked-at once. Felt the same way, except I did get sick. Ran off, too. There were a couple of words missing, here and there, but on the whole it did not detract from my reading pleasure. Besides, we're not getting paid for this. It's not like we're writing the next Pulitzer Prize here,ne? Still envious of your writing skills! This one becomes a favorite. Riko Ozaki
Riko Ozaki 2008-06-08 ch 1,	abuseHello Fifth Horseman Just finished your superb chapter of 'Thirteen', and I wanted to comment on it. Your characterization of all persons was dead-on perfect for me. Your description of the environment of Terminal Dogma made me feel as if I was there, like a fly on the wall watching everything unfold before me. I do so like stories that paint a vivid picture in my mind while reading them, and yours has done that for me. Granted, I had a suspicion of who might be in that tube, but the journey to find out who, was very satsifying. I only wish that I could write so well, and expressively. Thank you for a time well spent, and I shall travel on to Chapter two. Riko Ozaki

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