Wow. I just have to say I've never read anything like this ever before. It was dark but it really kept you reading... It also made realization jump out and hit me in the chest so much it scared me... Strange as it seems, it was beautiful in a sick sort of way. It was unique, definitely... Amazing, overall.

Marvellous. Beautiful. Inspirational.

The dark theme was present throughout the story, explained subtly but steadily in a poetic and brutally honest way. Only a mature mind may read this and catch the full literal meaning. Oh, the erotic elegance of it all! To me, it seems that Gabby submits herself to Troy's dominance, as they explore each other sexually again and again (in their own twisted, brutal way). You couldn't have strung the words up any better, or at least, I wouldn't have!

Love it, a work of a genius.

OMG so beautiful!
love your writings!

Wow that was good :D

X x x Alexandra x x X

Making HSM dark is fun, isn't it? But anyway, I loved this story. I could like Troyella if it was all done this way. I have to fave this.

Okay, I've never read any HSM fics before, but... if they were all like this, I think that I would start reading them. Hell, I barely even liked the first movie, and haven't watched the second. But this...

Is there something wrong with me for prefering this take on their relationship, for making it osmething that's not perfect and mostly corrupt and stuff, than their relationship in canon? 'Cuz I do. I absolutely adore how you wrote this.

I am normally a big fan of your stories, but this one felt rather empty to me. Perhaps that was intentional, but you didn't make it believable to me that Gabriella really loved him, so she seemed rather flat. That said, there were some great lines, especially the last three or four, and the denial was dealt with well.
~Ani

oh my god...you're amazing...

it was good. i feel bad for gabs =[ great job.

-hsmtroyella

I liked it. I understood it and it's sad but it's a great idea.

All I can say to that is... WOW...

wow that is ... just wow. i kinda feel bad for her. i mean common sense and being a genious and all you would think... anywho i liked it so keep it up and that was a very interesting piece though i love yoour tryans this was kewl

(practicing his Sindarin/Edhellen) Nâ vedui a alae! Mae córen: melon narn lín! Im hí lé annad dúlú! Pelíl peded í lam-ín-Edhil? Iston narn mae lín. :) Galú a teithad bain! Lé avo nuitho deithad! Cuio mae a nen maer a lalaith meren îr í lú tôl a adgevedím! ::At last and behold! Well done: I love thy tale! I am here to give you support! You speak the language of the Elves? I know well thy tale. :) Good fortune and fair writing! Do not you cease thy short writing! Live well and good water and joyous laughter when the time comes and anew we meet!::

woa

c'est tres, tres deep.
(practising my french :P)

i understand it kinda :) and then again, its a little bit distorted like you put it.

i think you got your aim very well :) well done x

Ally x