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| Hotgirlow 2008-06-28 ch 7,  | abusethis is nice i can't wait till this is updated |
| Hcc 2008-06-24 ch 7, anon. | abuseooh... how is ryou going to respond and what kind of outfit is it... |
| Mew Mai 2008-06-17 ch 7, | abuseHa! I was sure that Masaya was going to ask Ichigo to take him back or something like that. Good chapter though, hope you update soon! |
| Havoc-Flamer 2008-06-11 ch 1, | abuseWell, Rithralinde recommended this to me to flame, so I am! Chat-speak makes you appear to be sub par to a ten year old. Learn proper grammar, dipsh-it. You killed the characters, almost as bad as 4kids did, that takes a special kind of fu-ck up. Bolding random sh-it is not a good writing technique, it is tacky. Get some talent, why don’t ya? On a scale on 1 to 10, 1 being “delete” and 10 being “Novel Worthy”, I give this a 1. Do the intelligent people of the world a favor and take this piece of cr-ap off the site. |
| SukiraOfTheLight 2008-06-11 ch 7, | abuseWow! |
| Cilla2008 2008-06-10 ch 7, | abuseI really like how this chapter went. |
| Hotgirlow 2008-06-03 ch 6, | abuseHey why'd you stop i want this updated please and is kish dren in the english version and if so is he now good let me know as soon as you can. |
| Cilla2008 2008-05-28 ch 6, | abuseI can't wait to read what will happen next. I have enjoyed all of your chapters. |
| Cilla2008 2008-05-28 ch 5, | abuseThis chapter had some major drama. |
| Cilla2008 2008-05-28 ch 4, | abuseI have enjoyed this chapter a lot. |
| Cilla2008 2008-05-28 ch 3, | abuseI really liked how this chapter is going. You have did a really good job. |
| Cilla2008 2008-05-28 ch 2, | abuseI love this chapter and I am glad that Ryou had got what he wanted. I can't stop reading your story, it is just too good. |
| Cilla2008 2008-05-28 ch 1, | abuseYou have done a really good job with this story. I can't wait to read more of it soon. |
| Mew Mai 2008-05-28 ch 6, | abuseHaha. I hope Ichigo gets in trouble with her dad. Or what would makek it even more funny is if she accidentally blurted out everything like the ditz she is. *snickers* but, anyway, I hope you update soon so I can see what happens. See ya! |
| Daisy 2008-05-23 ch 2, anon. | abuseNo o fence but you are not that good of a writer. Put"" when someone is saying something. Tell the reader who is saying it. And for pities sake. Do you know what a sentence is. You Use... And after a dot, you put a capitalizing letter. Myself i am not that good of a speller. But there is something that is called a spelling program. You have great ideas but just look these things over and try to stick to the characters. And don't jump so much between POV. It is a pain to read. I could barely get throe the firs chapter. |