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| sulou 2008-06-17 ch 2,  | abuseI love this. It fits well with the canon, and speaks of all the things that Kaoru was probably feeling. I will enjoy reading along with this one. |
| leeroc101 2008-05-27 ch 2, | abusePlz update soon. I love it. i just finished watching it and the story moves right along with the show. Great Job. |
| InfinityOnTheRun 2008-05-27 ch 2, | abuseYou use 'and' a lot :O |
| skenshingumi 2008-05-27 ch 2, | abuseI like how you really give the sense of a young girl madly in love with the way she catches herself staring at him, trying to parse his words, and having to go to her bedroom to 'breathe'. I think I would have preferred you chose a canon manga scene for the second half but the touch with the flower at the end was a nice one. Also, in the reminiscence about Jin-eh, I think it is a lot more realistic to feel that Kenshin would save her or that she just didn’t believe he would let her die than say she wasn’t concerned for her life. |
| Quetzalcoatl Mistress 2008-05-26 ch 2, | abuseI really love your writing style. Sure there are some mistakes, like a confusion with too and to, but, all the same, this story is very well-written. It seems that many of your stories revolve around Kaoru's unrequited love for Kenshin. This makes me rethink their relationship until I am convinced that Kenshin never really loved her at all... and that makes me somewhat sick and fed up with Watsuki and the idiotic oroing redhead. Please, I see promise in this story, you need at least one happy ending in your collection of stories, right? |
| Lyphta 2008-05-26 ch 2, | abuseaw this was a really sweet chapter. kaoru is falling so fast for him. if only kenshin can just own up sooner. but of course that doesnt happen so early. XD good job! keep it up! |
| InfinityOnTheRun 2008-05-26 ch 1, | abuse"Something more than adrenaline, yet something less scientific than it." Fave part :D Great story! |
| skenshingumi 2008-05-17 ch 1, | abuseI like getting Kaoru's snapshot version of how things unfold between them. The way you ended the chapter made me smile. |
| sulou 2008-05-16 ch 1, | abuseThat was very sweet. |
| Scarred Sword Heart 2008-05-16 ch 1, | abuseA good narrative of the first few chapters of the manga. |
| Thien Minh 2008-05-16 ch 1, | abuseIt's a very good start. Can't wait for more. |
| Onhiro 2008-05-16 ch 1, | abuseWell, at least Kaoru isn't being as foolhardy as she was in Mornings After. This is looking real interesting, I look forward to the next chapter. KEEP ON WRITING! |
| Lyphta 2008-05-15 ch 1, | abuseits very sweet i think. :) and very touching. i think its pretty true that kaoru probably had those little incidents where her heart just flutters because of him. good job! keep it up! |