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Ms. HellFire 4590
2008-12-29 . chapter 1
Aww, you know I love when people write stories like this. When you've had the type of day I've had...well this is just the sort of thing I needed. It was adorable.
Kisses.
Romance and Musicals
2008-12-07 . chapter 1
Aw! That was really sweet and awesome.
woofyy
2008-12-06 . chapter 1
ngaww xD thats all i can say . ngaw xD soul mates. they are so rare to find xD anyways good luckies with your future stories~
JDPhoenix
2008-09-09 . chapter 1
That was so sweet, I absolutely loved it.
Kaze-no-Tenshi89
2008-06-16 . chapter 1
I'm sorry, but that was just... wow. amazing!
just way too cute. i love stories where the thoughts of characters are shown a lot (i do that in my own stories a lot). so bravo to you!
wonderful job!
british-babe-1995
2008-06-11 . chapter 1
That was really good. after this review im heading straight for the sequal.
noukinav018
2008-06-06 . chapter 1
that was a sweet endin' =)
haha
Gilraen Narmolanya
2008-06-04 . chapter 1
Cute!:)
energizerturtle45
2008-06-04 . chapter 1
AW! that was awesome! good job!
Numba1JimmyFan
2008-05-22 . chapter 1
That was so cute. =)
I loved it. You must write more stories!
AntiqueDreams
2008-05-22 . chapter 1
Aww, this was so sweet. I enjoyed reading, thanks for posting ~
Pumpernickel Muffin
2008-05-18 . chapter 1
I really liked this. But, there were a few places where you switched the POV. For example:

He had told me one day, after admitting that to him, that I knew the honest and authentic James Neutron. I knew of his fear of failure, of disappointing his parents, of potentially losing his intelligence, of not being able to help people in need. I knew of his weird and quirky thoughts and interests. Such as his love of chocolate covered potato chips and ability to quote comics from the 80s such as Calvin and Hobbes. She knew what made him angry and what made him sad to the point of tears. She was the only one to see him cry, from the cell on that alien planet to holding him close after his grandmother passed away a few years ago. Despite all these faults and weakness, really because of them, she found herself loving him more.

And then in the next paragraph you switch back to first person. There were also minor grammatical errors as well. But overall, it was a cute little oneshot, and I enjoyed it.
Lady Arabella Malfoy
2008-05-18 . chapter 1
That was genius! Utterly brilliant! You put everything about J/C relationship in this small but very deep fic. I know, I must be not the first one, but can you do Jimmy part too?
Rockthis
2008-05-17 . chapter 1
Aw, so cute! I loved it!
MysticLady3
2008-05-16 . chapter 1
Love it, very well written. One question: Why is the paiing Cindy and Libby?
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