...*breaks out laughing*

Hahaha

Well... It IS good, but that was creepy...

Sableye is one of my favorite pokemon!

Yeah, go Sableye! I had one in my Emerald game, and it was the most reliable pokemon I ever had. If any of my others failed, Sableye could finish anything. He even did the best in the contests, too. Sableye is awesome!

That... was really funny. Especially the way it, well, everything. Awesome work.

Okay, I laughed, I'll admit it. That last line was just priceless, yet morbidly appropriate. XD

Anyway, it's all pretty well-written with no mistakes I could pick out. Only thing is, the parentheses comment about the 'this is not a game' bit seemed kinda unnecessary, in the point-out-the-obvious fashion (Seeing as at least 9 out of every 10 'fics aren't actually about a kid playing a GBA/DS), but whatever.

Still, this 'fic was actually pretty funny, and without making a complete idiot out of itself like most humor stories try to do.

*has requested moment of silence for Regirock*

*waits for a few seconds for moment of silent*...LOL! Oh my god, I'm cracking up! That was funny!

Oh man, the last scene went through my head in a hillarious fashon. That last part reminded me of Alien Hominoid ( A game)

Nice job! Keep it up!