WRITE MORE!

Aren't they all sisters? If so, wouldn't this qualify as incest? To me, that is nasty beyond belief. Sorry, I read the summary and coulsn't go on.
Shuffle Queen

A good basic plot, I was able to read it on the screen, and you give an explanation. You could add in a little more details though on reactions, etc. Other than that, it was pretty good! Keep writing!

love it! Please do a sequel

Hmm. It's not bad. Though maybe you should've given him clothes besides Brick, ya know. Maybe instead of a sweater, it's a short-sleeved shirt. Maybe instead of jeans, it's shorts. Whatever. Just don't make him too much like Brick...or I might mistaken him for Brick, but with a different name, heh :). Anyway, like FBK, space your fic a bit better. Maybe skip lines after a person finishes his/her dialouge and a new speaker speaks.

That was pretty damn good to say the least. I think you should write more, just space the fic a little better.

Not Bad, not bad at all. Do another one if you please.