Nice. Well done. The girl's mother is one cool lady.

Read this story before. Its always fun to reread a good story.

I really like this story. Your frist story make a whole lot more sense know. Write some more about this girl or someone else because you are a good story writer.

Hi Just read your story it was very good.

I am glad I found this story. I hope there are more stories to come. in this AU

A really nice begining. Please think about where you could go with this.

Ecellent! I loved reading your Reunon story, and this continues the feelings stirred while reading Reunion, and of course, as always, the envy of those candidates who Impress. I look forward to more stories from you. Thank you!

I LOVE THIS CHAPTER! (*x5)

Too bad this is a one-shot story. It would have worth few chapters. Ah...And I would definitely love to see how the girl goes in the future as well.

Maybe through some other series in the future? :D

Well, that is simple. Nobody told the dragon that it couldn't take a ship between. Same thing with the antimatter engines in "All the Weyrs fo Pern". If anybody doesn't know that they need to do some reading! Thanks for a wonderful Pern story. Well done

This is starting to be a good story, I think, but there are several issues that need to be pointed out. first of all, this is really rushed in my opinion. like at the end of the previous story, there are major time gaps that could be expanded on.
Also, I don't have any clue as to what any of the characters are like, except for possibly Patricia.

This is a nice story, but the resolution feels a little forced. The pitfalls you create along the way are dealt with very swiftly indeed (I'd go as far as to say overly so), which gives the piece a rather rushed tone, and some of the ones you use for dramatic effect lack plausibility (the most glaring is a top-flight pianist teaching the Pernese all they need in a mere couple of months, and I have my doubts that the Pernese are that strict about keeping every candidate Searched). Many of the characters and plot points feel like mere ciphers, just plot-dressing aimed at moving the story on to the expected ending... and that leaves me a little unsatisfied as a reader. I think the basic concept has an *incredible* amount of scope and potential, and it's disappointing to have it rushed through so fast.

But it's still a lovely story. ;)

One technical gripe - your characters NEVER use any contractions in their dialogue. I don't recall how you got around the linguistic shift issues in your first story in this AU, but at least one of Menolly/Patricia will be speaking in her native language in this piece (both if the issue was swept under the carpet!), and given that, the lack of contractions do make the dialogue ring a little false.

Hey, I really enjoyed this. There are minor typographical nitpicks but they may just be stylistic. The only horror I have of this story is that I feel you rushed it and didn't give enough build-up from Ellen's POV. But, otherwise, aweseome!