this was great thank you for writing it

Wow. Certainly your best work to date, though I also loved BNW, and a very engaging story from top to bottom. Would have been interesting to see an epilogue exploring whether there could be any rapproachment with McG, but maybe it was more realistic to leave it where it was. I think we always want to see the happy ever after in splintered relationships, but of course it seldom works out that way. In any even, thanks for the hours of enjoyment from three extraordinary stories. I'll certainly be looking forward to anything you create in future!!

Your writing style intrigues me. I stuck with it through your second story despite the torture and other morally reprehensible stuff because the pacing was on point and the original American characters were interesting. I don't have to agree fundamentally with ideas expressed to learn something from the writer even in fiction.

You crossed the line in this story by the white hats helping a black widow spider kill an entire line for monetary reasons. HP, BW, and the Hogwarts staff just say hey I'll go along with this because these black hats would do much worse to me. At some point, a reader has to protest this much rationalization even in fiction. It is horrific. Wrong-headed. Nauseating. Despicable.


Your next several chapters can redeem the plot but the reading is hindered by the bloodlust, the self serving rationalizations, and aimless plotting for Pansy, Ansom, or some of the others.

I generally like to see African Americans or African British in HP stories but why is Kingsley Shacklebolt the Jar Jar Binks of this story?

Great stories, all three of them.
Thank you very much.

A compelling read, but the ending seemed a little abrupt.

good story, well written. it is worthy of being published. its got a nicely developed plot, with the only obvious flaws being grammer and punctuation,as well as a few word ommissions. i would recommend it to any Rowling's fans in need of an interesting and lengthy read.

I read two chapters. Your writing is quite good in style and is grammatically correct and such.

I got bored. I know that sounds mean but I might as well be blunt. You have Ron taking his brother's place. You have Ginny as an assistant in the muggle departments, you have Luna working with her dad on a magazine that has been in ehr life for most of it and Hermione teaching an incredibly dull subject. These are the people who lead the rebellion, do you seriously think they would settle on things so dull? I think your characterisation in some characters was good, Hermione prying for example. I don't agree with making Harry this crazy guy who couldn't sleep for a year, but I feel if you did need to do this then you could have written it better and making things moe tense.

Not a bad end to the story.

You wrote an incredible story. I enjoyed it from start to finish!

Well Done! A great ending to a well written fic here, one that had me guessing up to the last as to who would or wouldn't make it, who would be on Harry's side or might turn on him, and how things would end up in Magical Britain. Sweet to see that Harry and Hermione have worked through their immediate problems, and can't wait to see more of you stories in the future.

Its over? Really? Not even an itty bitty epiologe? Please . . .

It was a great ending, very tiddy and cleaned up the major loose ends. Now we all just wonder if they all lived happily ever after?

Hi,
Thanks for this story. I would have liked a bit more of some of your minor characters (Luna), but you told a good tale that ended pretty well without everyone getting what they wanted.
Alan

Tour de force. Really well written. I feel sad that we´ve reached the end. And I would have prefered if the ministers atempt had just failed and that the order had somehow orcestrated his downfall.

Thank you very much. Feel free to start another story. :D

Amazing story as always! Been a complete joy to read, thank you so much. Hope to see something new soon!

Stew

Weird sort of ending, really, when you look at it one way - the last few hours of Christmas Eve being spent in a pitched battle, followed by haggling over the future of the wizarding world, a mass witnessing of an assassination/murder, letting the murderer go free ... and then some drinks to 'let the steam off'!

I sort of don't understand why they wanted Phideas to do the deed ... I'd thought they'd keep his fate a secret from Robards, let him go (to some extent), then have her carry out the task way away from the Order members, so they can deny any implication in the murder and have solid alibis. But then you had Robards work out what was going to happen ... I guess I was being naive as I formed this initial opinion as to how things were going to go as I read along. Really, after this, how could they have let Robards go, even temporarily? As soon as he got away he'd either whip up more troops, wield his ministerial power against them in some other fashion or flee the country. And I guess they couldn't have any of that. But yeah, I can't see too much difference between one of the Order casting the curse ... versus their all watching Phideas do it. Their insistence that the metamorph do it puzzles me a bit. KILL THEM BOTH! :-)

The handling of Kingsley was well done - more of a grey area with possiblities to explore, maybe, than Robards' case. His coming out strong, declining both options. The idea of him being inducted into the Order (sort of) ... but never being trusted ever again ("you ordered the use of Avada Kedavra against us"). I thought that was perhaps the coolest part of the chapter, what you did with the fallen Kingsley; the issue of Robards was maybe more cut-and-dried, although still a bit puzzling to me.

Harry was to be killed right after the battle!?!?!?! I'm glad you mentioned that, it makes us easy to be on the Order's side re the assassination.

It was - is! - a very good story, I really enjoyed it. You obviously enjoyed throwing us some curves but they pretty much all worked (I would NEVER dare to write a serially-published story without having plotted it out first!). With some mega surprises, like Pansy's machinations. (Actually, compared with Pansy and The True Voice, Robard's behind-the-scenes plan at the end seemed a little simplistic, I think?)

This story started being written about 14 months or so ago, has it been that long? I haven't read any of your other stories ... I forget how I came across this 'untitled' tale. One of the first things that drew me to it was the feeling/plot of Harry and his peers all fresh out of Hogwarts in a sort of 'Brownian motion', milling about and trying see how they should form up, what they should do, if you know what I mean. Harry adjusting to a life without Voldemort ... breaking up with Ginny, getting together with Hermione. The formation of the friendship with Bill and Fleur (I really liked Harry's strong friendship with those two) and then the Order. These sorts of things were at least as interesting as the good-versus-bad plots I think. Maybe I was initially attracted to the idea of Harry ridding himself of Ginny and falling in love with Hermione - as a H/Hr man who detests canon's H/G I guess that was a powerful draw at first - but I'm glad I stayed for all the other interpersonal dynamics. Oh, and add the dissolution of the Weasley matriarchy to the list. :-)

Oh ... you're going to give this thing a proper title, right? ;-) Cheers and thanks for the entertainment, take it easy!