FAST?! This was not fast. I'm ripping my hair out over here.
Well, not literally... but still! I'm on the verge of it! Ah. Anyway. I like how Doug's sort of talking to himself. Kindasorta. =D

Poor Doug is losing it, I think. I feel so bad for him, he misses Tommy so much.
Then poor TOm, who is being tortured and whipped...ah, sorry, got lost in the thought...(I know, I know...I'm sick, but what can I say?)

I can't wait to see how protective Doug is when he finally finds poor Tommy. I hope he takes really good care of him, and shows him how much he loves the poor guy!

Ah, kinda creepy lol. I liked how you've got Doug's thoughts set up, although it seems like he's going crazy. But at least one of them was right =) And good for Tom to not giving in, I'd hate it if he did :(

I HAVE AN IDEA.
STOP TORTURING ME.
AND TOMMY.
>.>
You and your Tom-abusing people.
You make me sad.
But I love to read your fanfictions anyway. =D I'm a pseudo sadist, kind of.
Anyway, this story is amazing. I have no suggestions, but if I do later, I'll let you know. ;D

Alright, Jalyn is really starting to creep me out. Gah, evil man... cool chapter, though, and it didn't seem much like a filler chapter, just normal stuff that kinda needed to be added in. And i liked how you added in Doug's bit at the end as well =)

yeah, don't we just love those filler chapters. It was good though. I can sense that Tom is really starting to loose hope...poor Tommy.

this is so beautiful; i love everything about ur story. the tension, the suspicion, and of course Tommy himself! ur idea is quite original for a 21JS and i can't wait for more.update soon, darling. i'm enjoying this very much.

I actually liked how you added in a bit more info on Jayln(sp?) and Wynter, like their mum and the dinner thing. It was a lot better than just having it set around only Tom and his stalker in the basement. But I thinketh Tom is in trouble now, too bad he couldn't escape.

Lol i know that feeling. Whenever Tom does a really, *really* lame thing, I cringe and I sometimes blush in embarassment for him -sorry Depp- I can kind of see why Depp wanted out. BUT HE WAS HOT!!
Nice reference to Todd and Ripper- he was brillaince in From Hell and even better in Todd.
GUH! AHH A
BAH! i loved this chapter- a little upset at the shortness of it, but im just being selfish lol. It was long enough, but i just got so into it and wnated to know more! I love he whole obiedence thing- Tom has to do as Tom is told, and it will break him (hopefully) it'd be cool if Tom wasn't found for a while and slowly he started to believe wat Jalyn was saying...and no, im not perverted.. .much ;)
Ah and it's SO FREAKAN AWESOME to finally have a name! and a face and just a whole description. And you still keep him so cuning and disturbing too. I loved this entirely, update soon, or later and longer. or just meh. Cheers lov.

For a moment i had no recollection of this story- and then it hit me; hard. And my how I was estatic. I'll admit , this wasn't your best piece of work lov, but it was horribly shit either. Don't berate yourself so hard- you wrote well and correct- it may not have been as *some word* as you wanted, but it was still very good. And no, lol, not mad.
I had to smile at Duce and Ace though, "You met Officer Hanson there and you tried to seduce him?” Awkward muchly lol! But c'mon! Who could blame them, Tom's just so so hot!
Ack! Why is it that from the list Doug wrote dwon, HE can figure it out and I cant!! ARGH

ah yes those evil filler chapters. But I liked this, love Doug being so protective and intent on finding Tom. But who the hell took Tom?

Ahh-Ah-haha you can't do this! You can't leave it there! Not on that last note! No-oo! GAH! KINKY HOTNESS XDXD *breathes* Lol lov, just a forewarning if it's going to get as kinky as I think- and hope- it is, you may want to chuck it up to an M rating ( but as the M section tends to get neglected, just keep it in the T section with a massive warning-ffnet can get fkd.) But great! We're finally up to this bit- we're gonna find out his stalker and some kinky sh!t :D I liked how this was paced- it was quick, but still very in detail and just made the suspense greater.
Update soon! It's way too cruel to leave it there.
Btw- if you're not using a spell checker for your work, then you're doing an incredible job w/o it. Although the only down side with spell checkers is that the word may be right, but not the correct word for that sentence. But still, this was great m'dear

UH OH!

And you leave us there?!?!? What is that all about?

I'll be honest...I started reading this story...then stopped after chapter two...wasn't planning on finishing it... but then on a bored wim I opened it back up again... and re-read chapters one and two... then got sucked into the story. I'm now loving it...

THis is so so so good...
can't wait for more!

:) Update soon! OR I'll be forced to send Penhall after you!

ah, well, if you have Tom escape then the stalkers could continue stalking... maybe, I don't know. But you had it planned out well, and it's not like they randomly found at him at his safe house with no explaing how. The alley was a good set up because, yeah, would be fairly easy to follow Tom there(and this is me thinking he might not have been paying too much attention to be followed while with Ace and Duce). But two? I'm confused now, who was the one who kept calling Tom and which is actually Wynter? And for your book, adding commas before and or but depends on how you're using it really. And Doug wants Tommy? =) yay. But are you still working on the Bigfoot story or is that kinda on hold or something?

Considering the length of most fanifics lately, this wasnt short. And I'm exceptionally glad; I think my nerves wouldshread if this was short- I'm on such a suspense here.
Urgh there's another twist in here- Jack and Jimmy.
Very enthralling stuff, I've chucked you on my alerts and can't wait for more.