okay, so i really really love this story.
its one of the best ive read.
i was trying to figure out how to tell you how good it was, when i looked at the date of your last update.

LAST YEAR?!

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Update.
I beg you.

cool story! please please please update soon!

o i like it... especially peter and lara's stuff ;D

keep writing!! -Joanna

I love this. I usually despise Peter/oc stories but this is really good. One of a scant few who can incorporate a new character without ruining the plot. I hope you update soon. I'd really like to see where this goes! And am I sensing a suspian pairing as well?

Man, that's so exciting that Lara and Peter were banging each other, lol. :P There's a lot of grammar mistakes in your other chapters, but I'm too lazy to point them out. I want to see what's going to happen next!

:O! So she knows exactly what a griffen looks like. Interesting!

“And you have got to cut out all this nonsense about that girl.” She said angrily.
( There should be a comma after "girl" and "She" shouldn't be capitalized. )

“Look,” she said gently, reaching across the table to place a hand on her brother’s arm.

“I know this isn’t easy. It’s been ** all of us. But you and I need to accept it and move on.”
( All of this should be one paragraph. )

“All right, I’ll try and let this go.” He said, forcing a weak smile.
( There should be a comma after "go" and "He" shouldn't be capitalized. )

His thoughts then turned to the mysterious girl whose eerie blue eyes kept reappearing in his mind.
( There has to be a hyphen in between "re" and "appearing". )

“Out of the way please!” He boomed.
( "He" shouldn't be capitalized and you should use a comma at the end of "boomed". )

I mean really, Mac Beth was far more tragic and showed more depth.”
( "Mac" and "Beth" should be one word. )

On the small piece of scrap, written in an elegant scroll were the simple words ‘enjoying the lesion?’
( K, "lesion" is spelled like 'lesson', lol. )

the last few chapters have been wonderful! :)
keep up the good work.

I like:)! Your writing has DEF. improved over time. I'm very proud of you!

As for the story, I'm intrigued. You managed to make something as simple as meeting a girl interesting, yet not too exciting or unbelievable. And you managed to make Lara's having magic not completely far-fetched:P.

Grammar:

Down the busy streets of London, fog and steam wafted it’s way around the bustle of the umbrella packed crowd.
Wrong "it's". When "it" is possessive, there's no apostrophe.

All though he had come face to face with the fact that he would never return to Narnia, it had never been driven from his thoughts for a single day since his return.
I believe that you mean "although".

“Watch it, tosser!” The lad jeered at Peter as he fell back into pace with the crowd.
You're doing it again: no capital after dialogue:P.

“No more Fights Peter, just remember what Aslan said. It’s time we lived our lives back here. Just don’t let them bother you, all right?”
"Fights" is capitalized when it shouldn't be.

Peter shuffled to the edge of the sidewalk as to avoid anymore-rude bumping civilians.
A couple of things wrong with this sentence. You don't need a hyphen in between "anymore" and "rude", and you should put a comma after "rude".

“You’re the one who sits behind me to the left, brooding all day long as you pretend to listen to what Profession Morrow has to say.”
I believe that you mean "Professor", not "Profession".

“You’re Father too, huh?”
Two things: wrong "your" and "Father" shouldn't be capitalized.

Nice story- can't wait for more! :)(:

i love it!

I love the fic, I just have this annoying book cannonosity worm that, every time I start to truly enjoy it, burrows in and bits all the fun away! Gh stupid Cannon Worm!

Well any who, perhaps more chapters will kill it?

Alexandraya Belu

Looks good, and it wasn't that short. I'll look forward to a longer one next time though. Keep up the good work!

Yay!! Really nice chapters. I'm sorry people have been complaining, hope I wasn't one of them. Really looking forward to where this story is going, and I have to complement you on how true to all the character's personalities your being. Good luck with the next bit.

I like where the story is going. I think it has a good plot and the dialogue isn't too heavy, well at least not in my opinion. I can't wait for the next chapter to be posted. Keep up the good writing.
-A.Twilight.Love

i love it!