That's sad. I'm sorry you are putting this story on hiatus Haya-chan. Let me know when it isn't on hiatus anymore. I know you submitted this chapter months ago and I apologize for not commenting on it sooner. I haven't signed in to fanfiction for AGES. I hope you can write this story soon. Luv you Haya-chan!!

Thank god, a non-yaoi fic involving Ryou, and with such a cute/sweet OC character, too! I approve!

this story is really good and haya'chan is really cute.
Keep it up and take care.

Aw, that was cute Haya-chan. Ryou and Haya are getting along very well. Looks like Haya doesn't like Yugi and the gang very much, does she? The murders didn't sound very nice though, kind of creepy. I wonder who's doing it and why Haya's attitude changed very quickly near the end. Great job! Good luck with your future chapters, I can't wait to read them!

Aw, that was sweet Haya-chan! Ryou and Haya are so cute and innocent together. ^^ FALLENSTARSHIPPING FOREVER! So anyway, I think you wrote the chapter well. Just a word of advice, you could get your story deleted if you reply to reviews in your author's notes. It's best to just hit the reply button. Anyway, great chapter. It was cute.

(this is my reply to the review reply you left in the author's notes)

Yes, you did well with the tense, I like it very much. The prologue was very nice if you ask me. I like it. The effect was well done too. Mysterious good is very good. I like.
I agree, past tense third person is probably the easiest, or past tense first person for some people. I think that one's okay, but it depends on how well one can write it. Eyelids... Hehe, oops. I need to pay a bit more attention next time. Eheheh... I'm sure your other chapters will be good. Luv ya Haya-chan! Great job!

What a cute chapter, but I'm getting really jeleous as are my characters because Bakura seems so happy with Haya :sniff:

Emily - I thought he said he loved me and only me :cries:

Anuya - I'm not wprried, because I still have my Thief!

Me and Emily - GOOD FOR YOU! :both break out sobbing:

She is so funny...and adorable! This is really good, and I haven't seen any tense mistakes. Good job! They are really sweet;They will make a cute couple later on! And I think the murders have something to do with Haya, possibly? Maybe...Anyway, this is a great story, and you are doing a wonderful job.

Another great chapter; this was kind of cute though.
Update soon, I want to see what happens next.

OMG~! Adorable~! I loved how Haya seems so fascinated with the clothes~! xD oh and the apple part made me giggle like crazy~! >3<

LOVED THIS CHAPPIE~! I can't wait for more~! ^.^

Omg B has somehow got into the YuGiOh world and is killing people there instead =O
And Haya is so cute and clueless, I wanna hug her!

Another great chapter, keep going; I want to see what happens next.

Wayy, updates, i've been so busy with exams recently it's nice to get back to some good stories.
There seems to be something slightly mysterious about this girl...i wonder? ;)

Omg Haya is so cute!!
But how did she know what a sofa was?

That's so awesome Hikari~!! ^.^ you write good stories~! this chapter is so cute and sweet~! hee hee~ HayaXRyou is so cute~! >w<

I can't wait for the next one~! keep up the great work okay? -loves- ^.^

Great story, this is really well detailed and very well-written.
Update soon, I want to see what happens next.