Reviews for Something More

Reviews For: Something More - Reviews: Page 1 of 3

Tomoyo Kinomoto 2008-07-31 ch 5,	abuseWell... if you want my honest opinion, then I'll have to say that this story isn't as good as some of your other ones. Hoever, it's still really good! Good luck with all of your work!
Tomoyo Kinomoto 2008-07-31 ch 4,	abuseThe chapter wasn't awful, but the battles were a little shabby. The rest of it was fine! Really!
Some Enchanted Evening 2008-07-30 ch 1,	abuseHaha! That last sentence, the words that got cut out by were "hard" and "on". Man, , assuming the worst, aren't we?
Some Enchanted Evening 2008-07-29 ch 5,	abuseHallo! waves I thought I'd finally get off my lazy butt and check out some of your fics. I haven't been disappointed! :-) Since the fic is over, I'm going to try and review it all in one shot: Firstly, I thought the ending was perfectly sweet and perfectly appropriate for Ash and Misty. Like you said, the 'declarations of true love' are not only often inappropriate for the characters, but also abrupt, ill-fitting, and, worst of all, get a bit paint-by-numbers in the various AAML stories. (Y'know the type: Misty gets upset when they fight (as though it's anything new that they FIGHT), runs off, Ash follows, TRU LUV follows.) I found this one much more...organic, I think would be the word. It felt natural. It also fit extremely well with Ash's character, because he's not one to keep his thoughts to himself--he's just starting to figure out how he feels for Misty and it's very in character for him to share those feelings out loud as he discovers them one at a time. He's not a secretive person. I thought you did a good job with the battle scene in Chapter 4. I know a few others said it was rushed but honestly, long battles in fics are boring. It's one of those cases where words can really only do so much to help form the picture. Action scenes in general are really hard to write (at least that's my opinion) and I thought you did a really good job of it in both the gym battle and the scenes with Ash and Misty on the island. I think you're extremely creative and have great, original plot ideas. I wish this one had been fleshed out a bit, because it felt like a whole lot of plot in only a few chapters, y'know? However, I'm simply pleased to see new, fresh ideas that haven't been overdone to death (see above description of 'classic' AAML fic idea). The last thing I'd like to say is that you need to have more confidence in yourself! Quite a few chapters here you call bad/crappy at the end, or say that you're unhappy with how it turned out. We're our own worst critics, and pointing attention to problems in the fic often draws attention away from what is done well or right (and much here is done well and right). For example, if you hadn't pointed it out yourself, I doubt anyone would call you out for being too dialogue-intensive. Don't be so ** yourself; you're a very good writer! :-)
KaterinaBeloved 2008-07-28 ch 5,	abuseWHAT THE FUDGESTICKS?! How can it be OVER?! NO! Oh well, great story anyways! But now Misty's all better and that makes me happy! :)
Future AJ 2008-07-28 ch 5, anon.	abuseLol, stop bashing your own fic it's fine. Great job, its a good idea and something different. Something that would probably happen in a show, not actually saying I love you but giving off a big hint. This is Future AJ Saying Peace Out
thedarkpokemaster 2008-07-28 ch 5,	abuseWOW I did not see that coming at all. loved the ending by the way
pikagurl23 2008-07-27 ch 5,	abuseThough I agree the ending was a bit abrupt, it was still sweet. And I also agree that the love confession fics are extremely difficult to write not only because everyone seems to do them but also because you can't make the confession seem too rushed. Have some self-confidence and try it! But anyways, this was a joy to read and I hope to see more from you in the future.
Brittany 2008-07-27 ch 5, anon.	abuseThat was a great story, and I think you're an excellent writer. There's no reason for you to not have self confidence. I love the way you write Ash and Misty, and I always look forward to your stories and updates. =)
UzumakiAAMLuv 2008-07-03 ch 4,	abuseThis is such a good story!!^6 Please continue the good work!
AAMLfan 2008-07-02 ch 2,	abuseWhy you dirty beep beep beep beep bep! I'm gonna beep beepty beep.And when Ash gets ahold of you I'm sure he'll do the same.LOL just jokin. Or am I.
FutureAJ 2008-06-30 ch 4,	abuseMan,, It's not a bad chapter, keep it up. Yeah, you do have just alittle too much dialogue. Plus, you should add more detail into battle, for instance, That steelix sounded like it was like strong. So one attack no matter how powerful shouldn't have took it out like that. But it's easy, I did it with my story all planed out, then the rest was just freestyling it's easy. Great chapter Update Soon. This is Future AJ Saying Peace Out
NBB-1-Fan 2008-06-29 ch 4,	abuseThat chapter was kinda bad, but that's OK because I know you'll make it up in the next chapter! I do wonder what's up with Misty though. I hope you post the next chapter soon. Please and Thank you!
Lipana 2008-06-27 ch 4, anon.	abusedidn't Ash already meet Darkrai in the movie "Palkia vs. Dialga vs. Darkrai?"
pikagurl23 2008-06-27 ch 4,	abuseAnother great chapter! I look forward to reading the next one and seeing what exactly is up with Misty. Keep up the great work!

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