Well, that was kind of a fluffy story in a sense - sweet ending, if a little OOC for Snape. Glad Harry's happy!

I love how everyone's confused that Harry won't stay in bed! Oh, and I thought Snape's characterization was better last chapter. He was more... indifferent...

Yay, Harry's going to get a new guardian...

Rescuer, heh. Good as any. Somehow, "okay" doesn't seem like a Snape word to me. Is the woman Madame Pomfrey? I liked her. I also liked Harry's reaction - how he wouldn't stay in the bed even when told to, because he'd been conditioned against it.

What...? I wouldn't think Snape would be quite so nice about it. Oh well, it's your interpretation and my choice to read it. I'll be interested to see what happens next.

Not every sentence has to be a masterpiece in writing and simple sentences aren't to be prohibited, but you are tending towards more simple ones. I noticed, as a description of Snape for example, you wrote:

The man was tall and dark. He had long, black greasy hair.

The description is adequate. We know what Snape looks like. But it's rather dry to read. Try combining the sentences, add an active verb, a dependent clause:

The man was tall and dark, his black, greasy spilling down about his shoulders.

The verb "spilling" provides a more specific image and the dependent clause makes more of a flow. This sort of description is more interesting to read to me.

Hope I'm not being rude, I'm just trying to offer some suggestions.

This is rather extreme, but I'll go with it. The writings rather simple and straightforward - perhaps you could add more to the descriptions and vary sentence length.

Excellent!! Well done!

Yep! Rescuer has come! Severus will fun dealing with this! lol

Hee hee! Poor Severus! I don't suppose it occurred to him Harry would get attached that quickly!

Good Poppy. Don't argue over the unimportant issues right now. Get the medicine down him. Worry about the bed later. Still liking the story!

Wow! I would like to read this from Snape's POV. How did come in and why? What did he see? Good story!

Got some misspellings here as well.

Arrgghh! Get these people!

This was a cute story and all, but you didn't explain why Severus went to the Dursley's. Did Dumbledore send him? Is he supposed to check on him and he heard Harry screaming? It just doesn't make sense that Severus suddenly went to Privet Drive knowing that he was abused...

This is good so far, but why did Severus end up Privet Drive in the first place to save Harry?

ALSOME LOVE IT KEEP GOING!!